Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Your English-speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport. Write an email to your friend. In your email:

• recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn
• explain how your friend could learn this sport
• suggest that you both learn this sport together

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Hello Michael,

I hope you are doing great.I think we should join the Arena swimming club to learn swimming since you asked me about the advice regarding to learn a new sport. This newly opened complex is just one mile away from our society.

As you are planning to joint the army services in future. Therefore, you should learn this competitive sport which will help you to enhance your stamina and confidence building. Secondly, I know you are little scare from deep waters, so this learing process may helps you to mitigate this issue.

I know about a trainer in this complex which has a lot of experience in this field, and he had trained many athletes at the state level. His profile is great so we can hire him as our guide. The whole process of learning will hardly take two months. For your information, I have already talk with the management of Arena, and they agreed to give us a discount in training fee. we will both take the class at the same time.

I hope you will consider my suggestion.

Kind regards,

Zubair.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.5

You address all three requirements clearly: you recommend swimming, explain that your friend could learn at Arena with an experienced trainer, and invite him to take lessons with you. The reasons are relevant and personalised, especially the links to his future army plans and fear of deep water. Details such as the club’s distance, the trainer’s experience, and the discount make the advice practical. The ideas are generally extended and supported, although the benefit of swimming for “confidence building” and how lessons would help with deep-water anxiety could be explained more specifically. The email also has an appropriate friendly purpose and closing. To strengthen it further, develop those benefits with a concrete example of what the training would involve.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The email has a clear overall arrangement: you introduce the recommendation, explain why it suits Michael, describe how to learn, and finish with an invitation and closing. Paragraphing helps distinguish these stages, and phrases such as “Secondly” and “For your information” guide the reader. This gives the message a coherent progression. However, some linking is mechanical or awkward: “As you are planning to join the army services in future. Therefore” separates a dependent clause from its result, while “Secondly” does not introduce a clearly parallel point. The reference to the trainer and “he” is understandable, but the transition to the discount and shared classes could be smoother. Connect related ideas more naturally and avoid unnecessary signposting.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range for a friendly advice email, including relevant terms such as “competitive sport,” “stamina,” “trainer,” “athletes,” and “discount.” These choices communicate the main ideas, and the vocabulary about swimming and training is generally appropriate. You also attempt more specific expressions, but some are inaccurate or unnatural: “advice regarding to learn,” “confidence building,” “scare from deep waters,” and “mitigate this issue” do not fit the intended meaning or collocation well. There are also spelling and word-form slips, including “learing” and “joint” where “join” is intended. Aim for natural combinations such as “advice on learning,” “afraid of deep water,” and “build your confidence,” and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a reason clause with “since” and a relative clause describing the trainer. The message remains understandable, but errors in verb forms, sentence boundaries, agreement, and articles limit accuracy. For example, “I have already talk” should be “I have already talked,” and “this learing process may helps” needs “may help.” “As you are planning to joint the army services in future. Therefore” is an incomplete sentence followed by an unnecessary result marker; combine it into one sentence. There are also missing or incorrect articles in “you are little scare” and “at the same time.” Practise checking each sentence for a complete clause and matching auxiliaries with the correct verb form.

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