Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-10
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
Your English-speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport. Write an email to your friend. In your email:
- recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn
- explain how your friend could learn this sport
- suggest that you both learn this sport together
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ....................................,
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Dear friend, Sarang
Hello! How are you i hope you well.So i heard about you want to learn sports activity.So i have one sport activity ground.
And this ground in we are easyly play cricket,football,badminton,tabble tennis ete.. we play very well.And if we do sport activity so we also growing our physical and mental health.
And you also learn new sport activity. Because this sport ground in we have one sports teacher so he learn good. And me and my friend both was doing all sports activity. So In my opinion you need to join this sport activity. Then we both learn sport activity together well. Also we enjoy lots of sports activity. we will learn very wall sport activity and pass in all activity with good grades. I will feel very happy if you join sports activity.
I look forword to your response.
Best wishes,
Jiya
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
You make a relevant recommendation by naming sports available at a local ground, and you address learning through a sports teacher and the idea of joining together. However, the task asks you to recommend one suitable sport, while you list several—cricket, football, badminton and table tennis—without explaining which one your friend should choose or why it suits them. The learning plan is also vague: “he learn good” does not explain how lessons or practice would work. Your invitation to learn together is clear, but the response is slightly below the required 150 words. Develop one recommendation with a reason and a practical learning plan, and add a little more relevant detail.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The email has a recognisable opening, body and closing, and the ideas broadly move from introducing sports to suggesting a teacher and inviting your friend to join. This gives the reader some overall organisation. However, progression is weakened by repeated phrases such as “sport activity” and “we both learn sport activity together,” while links such as “And,” “Because” and “So” are used mechanically or do not clearly connect the ideas. The paragraphing also leaves the recommendation and learning advice mixed together. Organise the message into clear stages—recommend one sport, explain how to learn it, then invite your friend—and use pronouns or varied linking phrases to avoid repetition.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
Your vocabulary is basic and repetitive, but some key meaning is understandable: “sports teacher,” “physical and mental health” and “join” relate to the topic. At this level, however, repeated use of “sport activity” and “sports activity” limits precision, and several word choices or spellings make the message harder to follow, including “sport activity ground,” “easyly,” “tabble tennis” and “pass in all activity with good grades.” The last phrase is also unclear in this context. Build a small set of accurate expressions for lessons and practice, such as “sports centre,” “beginner classes” and “improve your skills,” and check spelling and collocations before sending the email.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
You attempt a few connected and complex sentences, including “Because this sport ground in we have one sports teacher so he learn good,” but the structure is often faulty and can obscure the intended meaning. Errors occur in basic sentence patterns, verb forms, agreement, articles and punctuation: “How are you i hope you well” needs a complete clause, while “me and my friend both was doing” has incorrect subject and verb agreement. “This ground in we are…” also has an unclear word order. Most sentences rely on simple patterns, with limited accurate variety. Practise forming complete clauses with a clear subject and verb, then check tense and agreement; for example, “The centre has a coach who can teach us.”
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