Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Your English-speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport. Write an email to your friend. In your email:

• recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn
• explain how your friend could learn this sport
• suggest that you both learn this sport together

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Jessica

How are you? How is work? I am writing this email to suggest that you start learning how to play hockey.

I heard that there is a new club in town. They practise every Tuesdag and Thursday from 14:00 until 15:00 at Julian Muller Primary. I also heard that after a month of learning hockey there will be matches on Saturdays.

I thought that it would be nice if the two of us can learn the sport together. That way we can bond while we are participating in hockey. i also think this will be a new opportunity to make new friends. I think this will be good for.our friendship and our health;)

Please ket me know if you are intrested in learning hockey with me.

Good luck with the rest of the week

Karlien

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three points: you recommend hockey, give practical details about the club’s practice times and location, and invite Jessica to learn with you. The specific schedule and the prospect of Saturday matches make the advice useful. However, the method of learning is only partly explained: you mention the club and its practice sessions, but do not say whether beginners can join, who will teach them, or what equipment they need. The benefits of learning together are relevant, though “bond” and “make new friends” could be developed with a more specific reason. The response is also 13 words below the required minimum, so adding a little detail about joining and getting started would help complete the task.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The email follows a sensible order: you introduce your recommendation, provide information about the club, explain why learning together could be enjoyable, and close by asking for a reply. This gives the message a clear overall progression. Paragraph breaks also help separate the main points. Some links between ideas are basic or repetitive, particularly the repeated “I think” and “I also think,” and the benefits paragraph moves quickly from bonding to making friends and health. Use a wider range of natural transitions and connect these benefits more explicitly. A comma after “Dear Jessica” and consistent sentence and paragraph formatting would also make the email feel more polished.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is adequate for communicating the recommendation and practical details, with relevant expressions such as “learning how to play hockey,” “matches on Saturdays,” and “bond.” The message is easy to understand, but much of the wording is simple and repeated, especially “I think” and “learning hockey.” There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “Tuesdag,” “ket,” and “intrested,” which reduce accuracy and polish. Some phrases are awkward or imprecise, such as “participating in hockey” and “a new opportunity to make new friends.” Aim for more natural collocations and vary your wording while keeping the friendly tone appropriate for an email to a friend.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of short sentences and more complex forms, including “I thought that it would be nice if the two of us can learn the sport together.” Most of the message remains clear, and the errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your plans. However, some grammatical choices need attention: after “I thought,” use “could” rather than “can” to maintain the past-tense sequence. The sentence “I think this will be good for.our friendship and our health” contains faulty punctuation, and the lowercase “i” should be capitalised. The email would show stronger control if you checked sentence boundaries and punctuation and used a few more accurate complex structures.

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