Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Your English-speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport. Write an email to your friend. In your email:

• recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn
• explain how your friend could learn this sport
• suggest that you both learn this sport together

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Ish,

I hope you are doing well. I saw your letter and I am happy that I was able to convince you to learn hockey. It is best suitable for you as I know you have a strong upper body core and hockey is my best recommendation for you.

It is not really hard to learn hockey here as it is the national sport of Punjab. We have a lot of academies in Punjab who teach hockey but my best recommendation would be Akal Academy as they have multilingual teachers . This would help you to learn in a comfortable manner as you can communicate in your own language and grasp very easily. They provide 30 days training for just 30,000 rupees.I am also interested to learn with you as I was planning from a long time but I had nobody for a company.You can write me back and let me know what date suits you as well.

I will wait for your response.

Warm regards.

Yours truly,

Muskan

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.5

The email addresses all three requirements clearly. You recommend hockey and explain why it suits Ish (“you have a strong upper body core”), give a practical way to learn through Akal Academy, and invite your friend to join you. The details about multilingual teachers and the 30-day course make the advice useful, while “let me know what date suits you” gives the invitation a clear next step. The purpose and friendly relationship remain clear throughout. To make the ideas more fully developed, explain briefly why hockey would appeal to Ish beyond physical suitability, or add a little more about what learning together would involve. Overall, the response is relevant and supported, though a few points are stated rather than explored.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The message follows a sensible sequence: you introduce the recommendation, explain where Ish can learn, then suggest joining the course together and close politely. This gives the email a coherent overall shape, and phrases such as “This would help you” connect the academy’s multilingual teaching to its benefit. However, most of the content is placed in one long paragraph, so the shift from course information to your own interest is less clearly signposted. Some links also feel mechanical, particularly the repeated “recommendation” and the sequence of “as” clauses. Use separate paragraphs for the sport, learning arrangements, and invitation, and vary transitions so the progression feels smoother and the reader can follow each purpose more easily.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for a friendly advice email, including relevant terms such as “academies,” “multilingual teachers,” “training,” and “communicate.” These choices make the practical information understandable. There are, however, some imprecise or unnatural expressions that limit flexibility and collocational control. “Best suitable” is not idiomatic, “strong upper body core” is unclear, and “nobody for a company” does not express the intended meaning naturally. “Grasp very easily” is also a slightly awkward fit in this context. Aim for more natural combinations and precise phrasing, while keeping the friendly tone. The meaning remains clear, but more accurate collocations would make the advice sound more fluent and assured.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

The email includes both simple and more complex sentence forms, such as “This would help you to learn… as you can communicate…” and “I am also interested to learn with you as I was planning…”. The message is generally easy to understand, but some grammatical and punctuation errors remain. For example, “academies… who teach” has an agreement/reference problem, and “I was planning from a long time” uses an incorrect tense and time expression. The sentence beginning “I am also interested” joins two ideas without adequate punctuation, while spaces are missing after the full stops in “teachers .” and “rupees.I”. Review relative clauses, tense choices for ongoing plans, and sentence boundaries. Greater accuracy in these areas would strengthen control without requiring more complicated structures.

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