Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Your English-speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport. Write an email to your friend. In your email:

• recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn
• explain how your friend could learn this sport
• suggest that you both learn this sport together

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Fran,

I hope you are doing fine.

I am writing this letter to give you some advice about learning a new sport.

I thought about few sports options you could do in Adelaide. Because you do not like to do any sport that involves animals, such as horse riding, I recommend you to learn swimming as your new sport.

There is a new swimming pool built in Adelaide University at the Waite Campus area. It is near to your home and it is less crowded. So, it will be very convenient. The coach who teach how to swim is someone I know already called Henry. If you are available in this weekend, I can introduce to him.

I am also thinking to learn swimming. So, we could learn together at the Waite Campus.

Please let me know what you think.

I am sure that you'll love swimming. Exciting!

Yours truely,

Sumitha

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You address all three points clearly: swimming is recommended, you explain that a nearby university pool and a coach called Henry could help Fran learn, and you invite your friend to learn with you. The personal detail that Fran dislikes sports involving animals makes the recommendation feel relevant, while the closing asks for a response and maintains a friendly purpose. The main details are supported, especially the pool’s location and the offer to introduce Henry. To make the advice more fully developed, explain how lessons would work—for example, whether Henry offers beginner sessions or when you could start. The suggestion that the pool is “less crowded” could also be linked more clearly to why it suits Fran.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The email has a clear overall progression: you introduce your purpose, recommend swimming, provide practical information, and finish with an invitation and a friendly closing. Paragraph breaks help distinguish these stages, and phrases such as “So” and “Please let me know what you think” guide the reader. This meets the lower-band expectation of coherent overall arrangement and shows some effective progression. However, a few links feel mechanical or abrupt: “Because you do not like…” begins a sentence fragment, and “Exciting!” does not connect smoothly to the preceding reassurance. The pool and coach details could also be joined with a clearer transition. Use complete sentences and more natural links to make the flow smoother.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

Your vocabulary is adequate for a friendly advice email, and the sport-related terms “swimming pool,” “coach,” and “learn swimming” make the message easy to understand. You also use some relevant descriptive language, such as “convenient” and “less crowded.” There are, however, several inaccurate or unnatural choices that limit precision: “recommend you to learn” is an awkward collocation, “do any sport” is less natural than “play or take part in a sport,” and “Yours truely” contains a spelling error. “Exciting!” is also not the most natural way to express enthusiasm here. Aim for more idiomatic phrases and check spelling, especially in the sign-off.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple sentences and more developed structures, including the relative clause in “The coach who teach how to swim…” and the conditional “If you are available…”. Meaning remains clear throughout, and several sentences are accurately formed. Some grammatical errors remain, however: “I thought about few sports options” needs an article, “who teach” should agree with the singular subject, and “in this weekend” uses an incorrect preposition. The sentence beginning “Because you do not like…” is incomplete as written. To improve control, check articles, subject–verb agreement, and sentence boundaries, while continuing to use a variety of sentence forms.

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