Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Your English-speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport. Write an email to your friend. In your email:

• recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn
• explain how your friend could learn this sport
• suggest that you both learn this sport together

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Akash,

I hope you are doing well, I want to tell you about a new sport you can learn is vallyball.Its a great sport which need a full body strength and its good for you, as you have a good height so you can easily learn it.I know one coach in our town so you can learn this sport for them as earlier i already took training from them, and he is a good coach.Although i also thinking to start the practice again as you know becasue of the final exams i quit my practice temporarly, but now we both can start taking the training together.Whereas its beneficial for both of us as we can practice together at our spare time also.Moreover, learning any new activity is beneficial for our healthas we can get break monotony of tough schedule, and we learn something new.

Your regards

Jashanpreet kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three requirements: you recommend volleyball, explain that your friend could learn from a local coach, and invite them to practise with you. The personal details about your previous training and your friend’s height make the advice relevant. The learning plan is the least developed part: “you can learn this sport” from the coach does not explain how to contact or join them, or what training might involve. The benefits are also stated generally rather than supported with a specific example. The response is one word below the required minimum, so ensure you meet the stated length. More detail on the practical steps and a fuller explanation of why volleyball suits your friend would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The ideas are relevant and can be followed in a sensible broad order: you introduce the sport, mention a coach, then suggest practising together and describe benefits. However, the response is presented as one long paragraph, so the separate points are not clearly signposted. Some linking words are awkward or do not show the intended relationship: “Whereas” does not fit the sentence about practising together, and “Moreover” introduces a broad benefit without a clear connection to the previous point. The repeated use of “and” also makes the message feel like a sequence of joined thoughts. Use short paragraphs and simpler, more precise transitions to make the progression clearer.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough topic vocabulary to communicate the main advice, including “sport,” “coach,” “training,” “practice,” and “beneficial.” There are also attempts to express more developed ideas, such as “break monotony” and “spare time.” However, several spelling and word-choice problems reduce accuracy and naturalness: “vallyball,” “becasue,” and “temporarly” are misspelled, while “full body strength” and “learn this sport for them” are not natural expressions in context. Some wording is repetitive, particularly “learn” and “sport.” Check spelling carefully and build a wider set of natural collocations, such as “build full-body strength” and “take lessons from a coach.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including a reason clause with “as you have a good height” and a sentence beginning “Although.” The main message remains understandable, but some sentence structures and punctuation need more control. For example, “I hope you are doing well, I want to tell you…” joins two complete thoughts with only a comma, and “a new sport you can learn is…” is not formed as a clear sentence. There are also errors in verb forms and agreement, as in “a sport which need” and “i also thinking.” Use full stops to separate ideas, and review subject–verb agreement and auxiliary verbs when forming present continuous sentences.

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