Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Your English-speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport. Write an email to your friend. In your email:

• recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn
• explain how your friend could learn this sport
• suggest that you both learn this sport together

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear David,

I am writing this email to let you know that there is a new swimming class open for new learner. I was wondering if you are interested? As I am joining it.

This lesson will last for 2 weeks, and they will teach all their student one on two, That means we can be in the same group. As you know I already have a liitle experence in swimming, my father taugh me when I was little. Therefore, it might be good if I can guide you a little tips of how to float.

swimming is known for a very good calming soprt and easy to lose weight, you might find it hard at the begining, as long as you know know to float, the rest of the swimming style should be not a problem. I am still considered a beginner, So can learn together along the way.

One day we can join the swimming club together!

Cheers !

Kai

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You address all three points: you recommend swimming, explain that a two-week class offers instruction, and invite David to learn with you and later join a club. The personal details about your own experience—your father taught you and you can help with floating—also make the advice relevant and supportive. The purpose is clear throughout. To make the ideas more fully developed, give a little more practical detail about how David can enrol or what the lessons involve, and explain more specifically why swimming suits him. The claim that it is “easy to lose weight” is quite general; a more tailored reason would make the recommendation more convincing and better supported.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The email follows a sensible progression from recommending swimming, to describing lessons and your experience, and then suggesting that you practise together. The greeting and sign-off also suit the friendly purpose. You use linking expressions such as “Therefore” and “as long as” to connect ideas, and the reader can follow the main message. However, some connections are awkward or unclear: “As I am joining it” is left as a fragment, and “So can learn together” does not clearly identify who can learn. Paragraphing would also help separate the class details from the benefits and invitation. More deliberate sentence boundaries and clearer references would make the organisation smoother.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “beginner,” “float,” “calming,” and “swimming club,” so the main message is understandable. There are also attempts to express benefits and learning arrangements. However, the range is limited, and several inaccurate or misspelled choices reduce precision: “new learner,” “one on two,” “liitle experence,” and “calming soprt” are not natural or correctly formed. “Guide you a little tips” is also an awkward collocation. Aim to learn common phrases for lessons and instruction, such as “beginner-friendly class,” “one-to-one instruction,” and “give you a few tips.” Proofreading spelling and choosing natural word combinations would make your meaning clearer and more fluent.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mixture of simple and more complex forms, including the conditional “if you are interested” and the clause “as long as you know…”. These attempts help explain the class and encourage your friend. However, sentence control is inconsistent. “As I am joining it” is a fragment, while “So can learn together along the way” lacks a clear subject. The question “I was wondering if you are interested?” is not punctuated or structured naturally as an indirect question. There are also problems with agreement and sentence boundaries, for example “they will teach all their student” and the comma splice before “That means.” Practise complete clauses, consistent punctuation, and accurate agreement to improve control.

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