Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Production of sugar from sugar can.

Sugar cane growing in fields as it takes one and half year. When sugar cane growing up properly then farmers harvest all the land. Farmer clear leafs from sugar cane then send it to next process. Sugar cane harvesting is full process with different agriculture equipments, mostly with tractors and harvesting machines. Next process is crushing sugar canes in crusher machine. Crushing machine crush all sugar cane and make it to juice, purifying juice coming from limestone filter and all raw materials will seprate.

In Evarporator juice became syrup as in heating process,however crystals make in as the result of juice evaporates. In next process with the use of centrifuge all sugar crystals separates from syrup. In last process of making sugar from sugar cane is drying and cooling system, however it is lengthy process. Drying in certain amoutnt of temprature and cooling system sugar is ready.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You cover the main stages in the correct general order, from growing the cane through crushing, purification, evaporation, centrifuging, and drying and cooling. The growing period is also reported as about one and a half years. However, the task is only partly addressed because there is no clear overview identifying the process as a sequence that turns harvested cane into sugar. Some details are unsupported or inaccurate: the diagram does not show farmers clearing leaves, all raw materials being separated, or crystals forming during evaporation; crystals are separated from syrup in the centrifuge. You also omit the limestone filter’s role and the two harvesting methods shown. Focus on the diagram’s key inputs, transformations, and final product, and avoid adding unshown details.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The stages are generally presented in a sensible sequence, and transitions such as “Next process,” “In next process,” and “In last process” help the reader follow the production line. This gives the response a coherent overall arrangement. However, the ideas are crowded into two paragraphs, with the first paragraph containing several stages and little separation between them. Some links are mechanical or unclear: “purifying juice coming from limestone filter” does not clearly show how this stage connects to crushing, while “however” is used where a simple sequence or result would be more logical. Organise the account into a brief overview and a clearly ordered description, using precise links such as “After this” and “The resulting syrup is then…”.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant process vocabulary, including “crushing,” “limestone filter,” “evaporator,” “syrup,” and “centrifuge,” which allows the reader to recognise the main stages. However, the range and control are limited by repeated general wording such as “process” and “make,” as well as inaccurate or awkward expressions. “Agriculture equipments” is not a natural description of the harvesting methods, and “all raw materials will seprate” is unclear. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “Evarporator,” “seprate,” “temprature,” and “amoutnt.” Use accurate process collocations and check spelling carefully; for example, describe juice as being “filtered” and sugar crystals as being “separated from the syrup.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, and the sequence is usually understandable. However, the range is limited, and attempts to combine ideas often contain errors that make relationships unclear. For example, “Sugar cane growing in fields as it takes one and half year” lacks a finite verb and has an incomplete clause; “When sugar cane growing up properly” also needs a correctly formed verb phrase. Subject–verb agreement and tense are inconsistent in “crystals separates” and “juice became syrup,” while “In last process … is drying” has an awkward sentence structure. Practise complete clauses and consistent present simple passive forms for process descriptions, such as “The cane is harvested” and “The juice is heated until it becomes syrup.”

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