Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given diagram illustrates, the layout of manufacturing process to make sugar from sugar cane.

Overall, it can be seen that, there are several stages are included to growing sugar canes to making sugar.

To begin with, firstly sugar canes growing time which is approximately 1.5 years after then growing sugar canes harvested by the harvesting machine and man. Moreover, these sugar canes are now go for the further process crussed into the machine and get the sugar canes juice which is very sweet and tasty.

Furthermore, now juice are pour into the limestone fillter and got the pure juice for the upcoming process. In addition the pure juice pour into evaporator machine in this machine juice will heated and this juice will becomes syrup. After that this syrup go for the centrifuge machine in this step sugar is separates sugar crystals from syrup after this sugar crystal drying and cooling and then got sugar as a crystal

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover the main sequence from cane growth through to the final sugar, and the overview recognises that production involves several stages. The stated growing period of about 1.5 years is accurate, and you include harvesting, crushing, filtering, evaporation, centrifuging, and drying and cooling. However, the overview is vague and does not clearly summarise the process’s overall transformation from cane to sugar. Some details are unclear or imprecise: the diagram shows juice passing through a limestone filter, but “got the pure juice” overstates what is shown; it also shows the centrifuge separating sugar crystals from syrup, a point your description attempts to report but phrases confusingly. Make the overview more informative and describe each stage precisely, without adding unsupported qualities such as the juice being “very sweet and tasty.”

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response follows the process in the correct order, and the use of sequence markers such as “To begin with,” “Furthermore,” and “After that” helps the reader track the stages. The progression from growing and harvesting to processing and the final product is generally clear. However, the paragraphing is limited, and several stages are crowded into long sentences, particularly the account of evaporation and centrifuging. Some linking phrases feel mechanical or do not clearly show the relationship between steps, while repeated references to “this juice” and “this syrup” make the connections less precise. Group the early stages and later processing stages into clear paragraphs, and use concise transitions that guide the reader without interrupting the description.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant process vocabulary, including “harvesting,” “limestone,” “evaporator,” “syrup,” “centrifuge,” and “crystals,” so the reader can identify most stages. There is also an attempt to vary wording with phrases such as “upcoming process.” However, noticeable spelling and word-choice problems reduce precision: “crussed” and “fillter” are misspelled, “got the pure juice” is not a natural description of filtration, and “sugar canes juice” is an awkward phrase. Expressions such as “very sweet and tasty” are informal and not useful for an objective process report. Aim for accurate technical collocations, such as “the cane is crushed to extract juice” and “the crystals are separated from the syrup.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, and the sequence is usually understandable. However, errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction are frequent enough to make some parts difficult to follow. For example, “there are several stages are included” combines two incompatible structures, while “juice are pour” and “this juice will heated” have incorrect agreement and passive forms. The opening comma in “The given diagram illustrates, the layout” is also misplaced. Practise forming accurate passive sentences for process descriptions, such as “The juice is poured into a filter” and “The syrup is heated.” Shorter, carefully controlled sentences would help you express the stages more clearly while you build confidence with complex structures.

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