Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The diagram below shows us the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. We will discuss a shortly about it.

In overall, the seeds of sugar cane bowing in the field and after some days it started growing. When the sugar cane become larger the farmers harvesting it by machines or hand. Then sugar cane is crushing by machine and making the juice of cane and this process take a long time. Hence, this process were doing with a crushing machine.

Furthermore, after all these process then the next process is of purifying juice. The juice is purified by a filter which name is must like limestone filter and then after this boiling process of juice is started. So, the juice become syrup and after it sugar from syrup become seperated . Then this must be drying and after this become cooling. Finally, sugar is formeed by this process.

In conclusion, this whole process is doing for the procedure of making sugar from sugar cane.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You cover the main stages in the correct general order, from harvesting and crushing the cane to purifying the juice, producing syrup, separating sugar, and drying and cooling it. You also mention the two harvesting methods and the limestone filter, which are relevant details. However, the overview is unclear: “In overall” introduces inaccurate information about seeds and growth, whereas the diagram specifies that sugar cane grows for 12–18 months. Some descriptions are also vague or unsupported, such as saying crushing “take a long time.” The final paragraph repeats the purpose rather than adding a useful feature. To strengthen the response, give a concise, accurate overview and describe the key transformations and sequence more precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure and generally follows the process from beginning to end, so the reader can identify the broad sequence. However, progression is weakened by repetitive framing, including “We will discuss a shortly about it” and the repeated conclusion that the process makes sugar. Linking expressions such as “Furthermore,” “Hence,” and “So” are sometimes mechanical or do not show a clear relationship between ideas. References such as “this process” and “this” are also vague, making it harder to follow which stage is meant. Organise the stages into a clear introduction, an overview, and logically grouped process details; use precise links such as “After purification” or “The resulting syrup is then…”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant process vocabulary, including “harvesting,” “crushing,” “purifying,” “filter,” and “syrup,” which helps communicate the subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or forms are inaccurate, sometimes making the description awkward: “seeds … bowing” does not describe the diagram, “must like limestone filter” is unclear, and “formeed” is misspelled. Repeated use of “process,” “juice,” and “sugar” also makes the account less precise. Aim to use accurate terms for each stage and vary how you refer to the material as it changes. Proofreading spelling and choosing natural collocations will make the description clearer and more appropriate for an academic process report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, but the range of sentence structures is limited and errors occur frequently. Examples include “the sugar cane become larger,” “the farmers harvesting it,” and “this process were doing,” where verb forms and agreement are not controlled. Passive forms are especially important for describing a manufacturing process, but “sugar cane is crushing by machine” is faulty; use a form such as “the cane is crushed by a machine.” Articles and sentence construction also need attention in phrases such as “a shortly about it.” Practise accurate present-simple passive sentences and check subject–verb agreement, tense, and sentence boundaries. Greater control of these basic patterns would make the stages easier to understand.

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