Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The diagram illstrates manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Overall, it's a linear process consist of 7 important stages starting from growing of the wheat to ending with making sugar by it. Moreover, purifying and evaporating plays a significant role in this whole process.

Firstly, it all is started from growing sugar cane for 12-18 months, afterthat harvesting that sugar cane either manually with hands or with the help of vehicle like tractor or other depends on the budget. Moreover, 3rd step include crushing of harvested crop that we got into a juice form through sugar cane machine, than purifying that juice using limestone filter to remove all the waste particles and dust from it.

Afterthat, a big chamber light up by heat is utilised to evaporate juice to make it in form of surup all the wastefull things are removed bt evaporation and important minerals are just left. Than, most importantly centifuge is used to seperate sugar crystals from that syrup. Lastly a big drum is utilised to store all the sugar crystals while drying and cooling is perfomed and in conclusion sugar is made.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover the main sequence and include the key duration of 12–18 months, both harvesting methods, and the stages from crushing through drying and cooling. Your overview identifies seven stages and recognises purification and evaporation as important, so the process is generally clear. However, some details are inaccurate or unsupported: the crop is sugar cane, not “wheat”; the diagram does not say harvesting depends on budget or that evaporation removes waste and leaves “important minerals.” The final stage is drying and cooling the crystals, rather than storing them in a drum. To strengthen the response, keep descriptions closely tied to the diagram and make the overview more precise about the transformation from cane to sugar crystals.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction and overview are followed by the early and later stages in sequence. Time and sequence markers such as “Firstly,” “Afterthat,” “Than,” and “Lastly” help the reader follow the process. However, some linking is mechanical or unclear, and the long sentences in the body combine several stages without enough separation. For example, the sentence beginning “Moreover, 3rd step include crushing” moves from crushing to purification in one extended chain. Paragraphing is appropriate, but clearer sentence boundaries and more precise references would improve flow. Use a consistent set of transitions, and give each major stage or group of stages a clearly defined sentence.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant process vocabulary, including “harvesting,” “limestone filter,” “evaporate,” “syrup,” and “sugar crystals,” which allows you to describe most stages. There is also some attempt to vary wording, such as “utilised” and “separate.” However, several word choices are inaccurate or informal for an academic process description: “wheat” misidentifies the crop, “vehicle like tractor” is imprecise, and “big chamber” and “wastefull things” are vague. Spelling errors such as “illstrates,” “surup,” and “centifuge” also reduce accuracy. Aim for precise terms from the diagram and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, and the sequence is usually understandable. However, errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction occur across the response. For example, “a linear process consist” needs subject–verb agreement, while “purifying and evaporating plays” has a plural subject that requires a plural verb. Phrases such as “it all is started” and “afterthat harvesting” are not well formed, and several sentences run together with unclear punctuation. These errors sometimes make the process harder to follow, particularly in the long description of evaporation and centrifuging. Practise accurate passive forms for process writing and divide complex descriptions into controlled sentences.

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