Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The diagram illustrates the process of making sugar from sugarcane.There are total seven steps starting with growing and ending with the final product which is sugar.

Overall, Sugarcane takes the longest time to perfectly grow for use. Most of the the process requires specialized tool or machines but harvesting can be done both by manually and a vechile made for harvesting the crop.

First, crop takes about 12 to 18 months to grow and ready to be harvested.Second, the harvesting is done by specialized vechile or manually.Third, the sugarcane is move to a machine which crushes the sugarcane and take to juice out.Fourth, juice is then purified by using limestone flter.Fifth, the juice is heated in a machine called evaporator which makes the liquid syrup.In the second last step the centrifuge separates the sugar crystals from syrup.In the final step the sugar is stored in a container to dry and cool and ready for sale.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover the full sequence from growing through drying and cooling, and the overview identifies both the seven stages and the contrast between the long growing period and the two harvesting methods. The details about the 12–18 months, crushing, limestone purification, evaporation and centrifuging are grounded in the diagram. This gives the account solid coverage, while some points are less fully reported: for example, the final stage is described as storage and readiness for sale, although the diagram only shows drying and cooling, and it does not indicate sale. To strengthen the overview further, summarise the transformation from cane to juice, syrup and sugar, and avoid adding an outcome not shown.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response is arranged in a clear introduction, overview and chronological account, so the reader can follow the process from cultivation to the final product. Sequencing words such as “First,” “Second,” and “In the final step” make the order explicit. However, using a numbered transition for nearly every stage makes the progression somewhat mechanical, and the long final paragraph contains several stages without much separation. There are also awkward joins, such as “Third, the sugarcane is move to a machine … and take to juice out,” which briefly obscures how the ideas connect. Grouping related stages into two body paragraphs and varying transitions would make cohesion smoother and referencing clearer.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant process vocabulary, including “harvesting,” “crushes,” “purified,” “evaporator,” “syrup” and “centrifuge,” which allows you to describe the main stages. There is some attempt at more specific language, such as “specialized vehicle” and “limestone filter.” However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or informal: “perfectly grow,” “take to juice out,” and “stored in a container to dry and cool” do not express the process naturally. Spelling errors such as “vechile” and “flter,” along with repetition of “sugarcane” and “machine,” limit precision. Aim for accurate process collocations and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You communicate the sequence using both simple statements and some longer structures, including “which crushes the sugarcane” and “which makes the liquid syrup.” The overall meaning is generally recoverable, but errors in verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence boundaries remain noticeable. For example, “the sugarcane is move” should use a past participle, while “the machine … take to juice out” has an unclear verb construction. “There are total seven steps” also needs an article and a more natural grammatical pattern. Several stages run together without spaces after full stops, and capitalisation is inconsistent (“Sugarcane”). Review passive forms for process descriptions and punctuate each stage as a complete sentence.

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