Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The flow chart shows the production process for making sugar from sugar canes.

Overall, this process includes 7 steps to convert sugar cane into sugar. The process starts with growing sugar canes in the farm for approximately 12 to 18 months, and ends after refining sugar syrup to get pieces of sugar.

Initially, harvesting is done by cutting sugar canes manually from the land, once sugar canes has been grown, then extra upper part of the sugar cane (which is not useful) cut by the harvesting machine. Now by using crushing machine, sugar juice is extracted from sugar canes.

Before this juice has been converted into the syrup, juice went through the limestone filter for refining it , then this juice is gone through evaporator on high heat to becoming sugar syrup. After this stage has been completed, particals of sugar is separated from the sugar syrup. At last, this sugar partical are put for the drying and collong, so that they can be ready for use.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You give a clear account of the process, including its seven stages, the 12–18-month growing period, and the progression from cane to juice, syrup, and sugar. The overview identifies the start and end points, and the main processing stages are covered. However, some details are inaccurate or incomplete: the diagram shows both mechanical and manual harvesting, not manual cutting followed by a machine removing the upper part. The centrifuge separates sugar crystals from syrup, rather than simply producing “particals of sugar,” and the final product is described as sugar, not specifically pieces. The response addresses the task well overall, but more precise reporting of the diagram’s details and a fuller account of the separation stage would strengthen it.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response is arranged in a sensible sequence, with an introduction, an overview, and a chronological description of the stages. Linking expressions such as “Initially,” “Before,” and “At last” help guide the reader through the process. The progression is generally easy to follow, although some connections are awkward or unclear. For example, “once sugar canes has been grown, then extra upper part…” makes the harvesting sequence difficult to understand and does not match the diagram. The repeated use of “this juice” also makes the description feel mechanical. Use clearer stage-to-stage links and refer to each material precisely—for example, distinguish the juice, syrup, and separated crystals—to make cohesion more natural.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a relevant range of process vocabulary, including “flow chart,” “limestone filter,” “evaporator,” “crushing machine,” and “sugar syrup.” These terms make the subject clear, and the response attempts more specific language than a basic stage-by-stage list. However, some word choices and collocations are imprecise, such as “refining sugar syrup” for the final stage and “particals of sugar” for sugar crystals. There are also spelling errors in “particals” and “collong,” and “sugar canes” is less natural than “sugar cane” when referring to the crop generally. More accurate process terminology and careful proofreading would improve precision without requiring a much wider vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including clauses beginning “once” and “Before,” and the overall meaning is usually understandable. Some grammatical errors remain, however. In “once sugar canes has been grown,” the plural subject does not agree with “has”; “then extra upper part … cut” is missing an auxiliary verb; and “this juice is gone through evaporator” uses an incorrect passive construction and lacks an article. Tense also shifts awkwardly in “juice went through” within a present-tense process description. The final sentence, “this sugar partical are put,” has a subject–verb agreement problem. Use consistent present simple for process descriptions and check articles, agreement, and passive forms.

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