Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given graphic shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Overall the process beginns at the growing stage which is 12-18 months. The second step is harvesting either by a machine or a human. The third step is crushing the sugar canes through a maschine. The result of the third step is juice. The form of cane is changing in that third step. The juice is then purifying in a limestone filter. Step number five is that the the result of the fourth step is heated and the juice becomes syrup. This syrup is the going through a centrifuge. The function of the centrifuge is to separate the sugar crystals from the syrup. The last and step and therefore step number seven is to dry and cool it and the overall result of the process is sugar.

Step number one is compared to the other step the most time intensive step with the duration of 12-18 months. On the other main features there is no description regarding the time given but it isnt that long and time intensive like first step. According to the given information the second the is the only step where a human is actually participating in the process. The others steps are all with machines according to the given information. In addition to that the first two steps (growing and harvesting) are the only ones that are done outside. Based on the given information step three to seven can be done inside. In the third step the sugar canes dont have a high temperature compared to step five.

In Summary the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane is a process with overall seven steps. Six of the these seven steps are done by machines and not by humans according to the given information. The temperature of the sugar cane is changing through the process.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover the main sequence from growing cane through harvesting, crushing, purification, evaporation, centrifuging, and drying/cooling, and correctly identify the 12–18-month growing period and the two harvesting methods. The opening overview also makes the final product clear. This gives a relevant account of the process, although some details are less fully or accurately reported: the claim that only harvesting involves a human and that stages three to seven can be done indoors is not established by the diagram. The comments about temperature are also unsupported; the diagram shows heat at the evaporator, not a comparison of cane temperatures. To strengthen the response, prioritise the diagram’s observable inputs and transformations and avoid adding assumptions about location, people, or temperature.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an identifiable structure, moving from an account of the stages to a second paragraph of comparisons and a concluding summary. Sequencing phrases such as “The third step” and “The last” help readers follow the process. However, progression is weakened by repeating the same information in the opening and final paragraphs, and the second paragraph shifts into unsupported observations rather than developing the process description. Some linking is mechanical, particularly the repeated use of “step” and “according to the given information.” The phrase “the last and step” also interrupts clarity. Group the stages into a concise overview and a logically ordered description, using references such as “this mixture” or “the resulting syrup” to connect ideas without repeatedly numbering each stage.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant process vocabulary, including “harvesting,” “crushing,” “limestone filter,” “evaporator,” and “centrifuge,” and the reader can generally understand the intended stages. However, the range is limited by repeated general wording such as “step,” “result,” and “process,” while several word-choice and spelling errors reduce precision: “maschine,” “beg inn s” (written as “beginns”), and “is the going through” are examples. Some expressions are also unnatural, such as “the most time intensive step” and “the form of cane is changing.” Use precise process verbs and collocations—for example, say that cane is crushed to extract juice, which is then purified, heated, and separated. This would make the description more concise and technically clear.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The response includes both simple statements and some longer structures, such as “The function of the centrifuge is to separate the sugar crystals from the syrup,” so there is an attempt to vary sentence forms. Meaning is usually recoverable, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “The juice is then purifying” needs a passive form (“is then purified”), and “This syrup is the going through” has an incorrect verb construction. There are also errors in articles and sentence formation, as in “the last and step,” and the repeated “the the” is an editing slip. Improve control of passive forms, which are especially useful for process descriptions, and proofread each sentence for complete, correctly formed clauses. More accurate complex sentences would help express the sequence without relying on repeated short statements.

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