Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The diagram illustrates the steps of sugar making from sugarcanes.

Overall, the process consist of seven different stages starting with planting of sugarcane and ending with drying and cooling of sugar crystals. The process goes through harvesting, crushing to get sugarcane juice and some more stages to finally get the sugar as the end product.

In first step, sugarcane was planted and grown for 12 to 18 months to get fully matured. After maturing it gets havested by hands or using a combine harvester. Followed by crusing to separate the pulp and juice.

In fourth step, juice goes through a limestone filter and exit in its purify form. Next, juice is poured in an evapoerator and heated, which converts the juice into a thick syrup. Subsequently, centrifuge is used to separate syrup and sugar crystals. Finally the sugar crystals which has been separated are dried and cooled, and we get our end product sugar.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The response covers the full sequence and gives a clear overview: it identifies seven stages, the growing period, and the final drying and cooling. It also reports key transformations, including juice becoming syrup and the centrifuge separating crystals from syrup. These details show strong coverage of the diagram, with some features already presented clearly and accurately. However, a few descriptions are less precise: “planting” is not shown as a separate stage, and “separate the pulp and juice” is not stated in the visual, which shows juice flowing from the crusher. The overview could also distinguish the two broad phases—growing and harvesting the cane, then processing it into sugar—more explicitly. More exact reporting of the diagram’s labels would strengthen the response further.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The information is arranged in a sensible order, moving from the overview through the numbered stages to the final product. Paragraphing also helps separate the summary from the process details, and connectors such as “Next,” “Subsequently,” and “Finally” make the sequence easy to follow. This creates a coherent overall account. However, some links feel mechanical or incomplete: “Followed by crushing” is a fragment rather than a fully connected sentence, and “In fourth step” does not smoothly link to the preceding stages. The overview repeats several details that are then given again in the body. Use a wider range of clear transitions and connect each stage in complete sentences to make progression more fluent.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

The vocabulary is adequate for describing a process, and terms such as “limestone filter,” “evaporator,” “syrup,” and “centrifuge” show useful task-specific range. The writer also uses process verbs such as “converts,” “separate,” and “dried and cooled,” so the main meaning remains clear. Some word choices are imprecise or unnatural, however: “sugar making” is less suitable than “sugar production,” and “fully matured” is not the most natural description of cane. There are also spelling errors in “havested,” “crusing,” and “evapoerator,” which reduce accuracy. Aim for precise process vocabulary and check spelling carefully; this would make the description more polished without requiring more complex wording.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The response includes both simple statements and some more complex structures, for example “which converts the juice into a thick syrup” and the sentence describing the centrifuge. Most stages remain understandable, but some grammatical errors occur. In “the process consist,” the subject requires “consists”; “In first step” needs an article; and “the sugar crystals which has been separated” has a subject–verb agreement error. Tense use also shifts between present and past, as in “sugarcane was planted” and “juice goes through,” although a consistent present tense is generally appropriate for describing a process. The fragment “Followed by crushing” should be joined to a complete clause. More consistent tense and careful checking of agreement and sentence completeness would improve control.

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