Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The diagram demonstrates the proceture of making sugar from the sugar cane.

Overall, it consists on seven stages. The process begins with growing of sugar canes and ends with drying and cooling of sugar.

The manufacturing process of sugar starts with the growing of sugar canes in fields for 12 to 18 months. Followed by the stage of harvesting, which can be done in two ways harvesting by machine or farmers can harvest by hand. The next stage is crushing, sugar canes are crushed by a machine and juice is came out from the machine.

This juice is purified in a limestone filter, then it is heated by an evaporater which changed the juice into syrup. The next stage is centrifuge. It is second last step in which the sugar crystals are separated from the syrup. The final stage is drying and cooling of the sugar, which provides fresh sugar.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The response covers the main stages accurately, including the 12–18-month growing period, the two harvesting methods, crushing, limestone filtration, evaporation, centrifuging, and final drying and cooling. The overview identifies the seven-stage sequence and its beginning and end, giving the reader a clear summary. This is a relevant and generally complete account, although some stages are described more fully than others: for example, the centrifuge is said to separate crystals from syrup, but the final product is called “fresh sugar,” which is not stated in the diagram. To strengthen the report further, describe the final output neutrally as sugar and make the transformation from cane to juice, syrup, and crystals more explicit in the overview.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The information is arranged in a sensible sequence, with a brief overview followed by the stages in process order. Paragraphing helps distinguish the summary from the detailed account, and transitions such as “The next stage,” “then,” and “The final stage” make the progression easy to follow. This gives the response a coherent overall structure. However, some linking is mechanical, particularly the repeated use of “stage,” and the fragment “Followed by the stage of harvesting” interrupts the flow after the first process sentence. The final paragraph also moves through several stages in one block. Use a wider range of natural sequencing expressions and connect related steps in complete, smoothly linked sentences.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

The response uses an adequate range of process vocabulary, including “harvesting,” “crushing,” “limestone filter,” “evaporator,” and “sugar crystals.” These terms make the stages recognisable and the meaning is generally clear. There are, however, several spelling and word-choice problems: “proceture” is misspelled, “evaporater” is inaccurate, and “fresh sugar” is an unsupported and unnatural description of the output. Some phrasing is also repetitive, such as “stage” and “sugar canes.” Greater accuracy with technical terms and more precise process collocations would improve the report. For instance, use “the cane is crushed to extract juice” rather than saying juice “is came out” from the machine.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The response attempts both simple and more complex forms, including passive constructions such as “is purified” and “are separated,” and the sequence is usually understandable. Some grammatical errors remain, however. “It consists on seven stages” uses the wrong preposition, while “Followed by the stage of harvesting” is a sentence fragment. In “juice is came out,” the verb form is incorrect, and “an evaporater which changed” shifts awkwardly between present and past tense. The comma splice in “The next stage is crushing, sugar canes are crushed” also needs correction. Aim to keep the present tense consistent and check that each sentence has a complete clause; combining clauses with “where,” “when,” or a conjunction would help.

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