Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The figure decites the process by which sugar cane is processed to make sugar.

Overall, it can be seen that the process by which sugar is manuctured is a multistep linear process, which consisits seven differnt stage starting from being matured and ended when sugar is produced.

Initially, sugar cane plants have to stayed as a crops for 12 to 18 months. After being matured these plants are undergo through a harvesting process.There are maintained two different process for collecting crops, which are using a extract machine another one is by hand. In the subsequent stage the harvested crops are squezed by a machine, which are produce sugar cane juice. After that, the juice is undergoes through a purifying process where it filtred by limonstone.

Following this, pure juice is heated into a furnance and evaporated juice is became as syrup and centrifuge process separate sugar from this syrup. Finally, this syrup is go through drying

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the process as a sequence and include its main stages, from cane growth over 12–18 months through harvesting, crushing, purification, evaporation and centrifuging. The overview also correctly notes that it has seven stages, and you mention both mechanical and manual harvesting. These details make the response relevant and cover the task, although some stages are less fully reported than others. In particular, the final stage is left incomplete: you say the syrup goes through drying, but do not report cooling or clearly state that the finished product is sugar. The centrifuge is also described as separating sugar from syrup, rather than sugar crystals. To strengthen the account, complete the ending and describe the key output at each stage precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response follows the diagram’s sequence, and expressions such as “Initially,” “After,” “In the subsequent stage,” and “Finally” help the reader track the process. The overview is separated from the detailed account, giving the response a recognisable structure. However, the stages are compressed into one long paragraph, and some transitions feel mechanical or unclear. For example, “Following this” does not clearly distinguish evaporation from the centrifuge stage, while the final sentence stops before the process is fully explained. Sentence boundaries and spacing also need attention, as in “process.There.” Use separate paragraphs for the overview and process details, and make each stage’s connection to the next explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant process vocabulary, including “harvesting,” “purifying,” “evaporated,” and “centrifuge,” and the reader can generally identify the stages being described. There is some attempt to use more formal language, such as “multistep linear process.” However, spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable and sometimes make the description harder to follow: “decites,” “manuctured,” “squezed,” and “limonstone” are inaccurate, while “extract machine” is not a natural term for the harvesting equipment. Some phrases are also imprecise, such as “sugar cane juice” where “cane juice” would be clearer. Check spelling carefully and favour accurate process terms over elaborate but uncertain wording.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a relative clause in “the process by which sugar is manufactured” and a sequence of stages linked with subordinate clauses. However, control is inconsistent, and errors in verb forms, agreement and sentence construction occur throughout. Examples include “plants have to stayed,” “these plants are undergo,” “the juice is undergoes,” and “the syrup is go through.” The sentence “evaporated juice is became as syrup” also combines incompatible verb forms. These errors can make the process difficult to interpret, even though its general sequence remains understandable. Practise passive constructions for process descriptions, such as “the juice is filtered” and “the syrup is heated,” and check that each sentence has a correctly formed verb.

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