Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The diagram illustrates the step by step process of sugar production from sugar canes.

Overall, from growing sugercanes to produce solid ediable sugar ,it contains toal 7 manufacturing process. First three process are related with field production and others four are shows chemeical procedures about how suger is made from suger canes juice.

It takes almost 12-18 months to grow suger cane in field ,then it is collected from field by farmers or machine.After that through crushing process, juice is extracted from suger plants.By the help of the limestone filter, pure juice is seperated from impurities.

This juice then undergo in heat process where excess water get evaporate and a high density syrap produce through this way. After that by centrifuge process suger crystals is seperated from syrup. This vast amount of cystal then left in a big jar for drying and cooling. After proper cooling suger takes its usual look .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You cover the main stages in the correct order, from growing the cane for 12–18 months through harvesting, crushing, filtering, evaporation, centrifuging, and drying and cooling. Your overview also identifies the seven stages and distinguishes the initial field stages from the later processing stages, giving the reader a clear account of the process. Most details are grounded in the diagram, including the two harvesting methods and the separation of crystals from syrup. A few descriptions go beyond what is shown: the diagram does not say that the juice is “pure” or that the final sugar takes its “usual look.” To strengthen the report further, describe the diagram’s visible inputs and outputs precisely and avoid adding unsupported outcomes.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall progression: an introduction, an overview, and a chronological description of the stages. Sequencing expressions such as “First,” “After that,” and “This juice then” help the reader follow the process, and the overview usefully groups the early and later stages. This meets the lower-band expectation of a coherent arrangement and shows some of the flexibility associated with stronger cohesion. However, several transitions are repetitive, and the long final paragraph places many stages together without much visual separation. The reference in “This juice” is understandable, but more precise links between each input and its next stage would make the progression smoother. Consider grouping the stages into two body paragraphs and varying the linking language.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant process vocabulary, including “crushing,” “limestone filter,” “evaporate,” “centrifuge,” and “crystals,” so the reader can generally understand the production stages. However, the range and control are limited by repeated spelling errors and imprecise or unnatural choices, such as “suger,” “ediable,” “toal,” “syrap,” and “cystal.” Some phrases are also awkward for this context: “usual look” is vague, while “big jar” does not accurately describe the equipment shown. These noticeable errors keep the vocabulary from being consistently clear and appropriate. Build accuracy by checking spelling and choosing standard process terms, such as “sugar cane,” “syrup,” and “container,” and avoid informal or unsupported descriptions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a time clause in “After proper cooling” and a sequence of linked process clauses. The overall meaning is usually recoverable, but errors in sentence construction and grammatical control occur repeatedly. For example, “it contains toal 7 manufacturing process” has an unclear subject and incorrect number, while “First three process are related” needs an article and plural agreement. In “This juice then undergo in heat process,” the verb form and article are also faulty; “crystals is seperated” has subject–verb disagreement. Punctuation spacing and comma use are inconsistent as well. Practise accurate passive forms for process descriptions and check articles, plurals, and verb agreement in each sentence.

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