Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The picture illustrates seven different procesess of making sugar from growing to sugar cane to final product.

Overall, the processes of making sugar intitially started from growing sugar on soil, further devided in two part of harvesting and passes to different remain 5 steps and make a final crystal clear sugar.

According to the diagram, the processes begain with growing sugar and it takes 12 -18 months to meet the apropriate lenght of sugar cane. Thereafter, harvesting processes take place and devided in two different cathegories, in which either sugar harvest trough manual process with the help of human and another is by a big machine. Once harvesting complete than sugar cane step up to nextv process of crushing and convert in to liquid, and than purifying process this juice by limestone fenal type filter to remove impurities.

After a optimal quality of juice purification, evaporation step take place in heated chamber in which juice formed in to a thick syrup. Centrifugal is next process for separtion of sugar crystal from a thick syrup and set a side for drying and cooling process in container.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The response covers the main stages in the correct order, including the 12–18-month growing period, the two harvesting methods, crushing, limestone filtration, evaporation, centrifuging, and final drying and cooling. The overview also identifies the process as moving from cultivation to a finished sugar product. This gives a clear account of the diagram’s central features. Some details are less precise: “crystal clear sugar” is not a feature shown, and the final stage is described as setting the product aside in a container rather than explicitly stating that sugar is dried and cooled. To strengthen the summary, use a more factual overview and describe the output of each stage precisely, especially the separation of crystals from syrup.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response is arranged in a sensible sequence: an introduction and overview are followed by the early stages and then the later processing stages. Paragraphing helps distinguish the overview from the detailed account, and transitions such as “Thereafter,” “Once,” and “After” guide the reader through the process. This supports clear overall progression. However, some links are awkward or unclear, particularly “Once harvesting complete than sugar cane step up to nextv process,” and repeated use of “processes” makes the account feel mechanical. The overview’s reference to “different remain 5 steps” is also difficult to follow. Use simpler, more direct transitions and make each sentence’s subject clear to improve cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The response uses relevant process vocabulary, including “harvesting,” “crushing,” “limestone filter,” “evaporation,” “syrup,” and “separation,” so the reader can generally identify the stages. There is also an attempt to vary wording with terms such as “purification” and “centrifugal.” However, inaccurate word forms, spelling, and collocations are noticeable: “procesess,” “intitially,” “devided,” “fenal,” and “separtion” reduce precision, while “crystal clear sugar” is not an appropriate description of the product. Some phrases, such as “sugar cane step up,” are difficult to interpret. Aim for accurate process collocations and check spelling; precise terms such as “sugar crystals” and “is fed into” would make the description clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple and more complex sentences, including a relative clause in “in which either sugar harvest…” and a time clause beginning “Once harvesting complete.” The sequence is usually understandable, but grammatical control is inconsistent. Examples include missing auxiliaries in “Once harvesting complete,” incorrect verb patterns in “juice formed in to a thick syrup,” and agreement or tense problems in “evaporation step take place.” Articles and sentence construction also need attention, as in “After a optimal quality of juice purification.” These errors sometimes make relationships between stages unclear. Build accuracy with straightforward present-simple sentences first, then add subordinate clauses only when their subjects and verb forms are secure.

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