Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The diagram given below illustrates the method of making sugar form sugar cane. So we can understand this process by using this diagram.

First of all, we need sugar canes, after getting this it can be send to factories for fruther processing, after this long process we get this type of sugar.

In this paragraph we can see the diagram and make the important point of view. Firstly we grow sugar canes after 12 months we can harvest our crop. After this we can send it to industry, morever in the third step we need to crush this by using machines. In addition, in the fourth step this juice must be purified for fruther process. After this we give heat to this mixture that this juice becomes syrup. And in the second last step we give it proper shape, after this it require time for dry and keep it tempurature up.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the subject as sugar production and mention several stages, including growing, harvesting, crushing, purifying and heating the juice. However, the response only partially reports the process: it omits the centrifuge’s separation of sugar crystals from syrup and the final drying and cooling stage, and it does not give a clear overview of the complete sequence. Some details are inaccurate or vague: the diagram gives a growing period of 12–18 months, not simply 12 months, and “give it proper shape” does not describe what happens in the centrifuge. To improve, summarise the process from cane growth to the finished sugar, accurately explain the key transformations, and avoid adding unsupported details such as sending the cane to an industry or giving sugar a shape.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation: the response begins with an introduction and then attempts to follow the numbered stages, using markers such as “First of all,” “Firstly,” and “in the fourth step.” This gives the reader a basic sense of sequence. However, the opening repeats the purpose of the diagram without adding information, and the paragraphing does not clearly separate an overview from the stage-by-stage account. Several links are mechanical or confusing, particularly “after this long process” and “And in the second last step,” while the final sequence is difficult to follow. Organise the report into a concise introduction and overview followed by logically grouped stages, and use clear references to show how each stage leads to the next.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant process vocabulary, including “sugar canes,” “crush,” “purified,” “heat,” and “syrup,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several choices are imprecise or unnatural for describing a manufacturing diagram. For example, “give it proper shape” does not accurately name the centrifuge’s function, and “keep it tempurature up” is unclear. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “form” for “from,” “fruther,” “morever,” and “tempurature.” Build a more precise set of process terms, such as “extract the juice,” “separate the crystals,” and “dry and cool the sugar,” and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts some longer sentences and sequencing clauses, for example, “After this we give heat to this mixture that this juice becomes syrup.” However, the sentence structures are often faulty, and the range remains limited. In “after getting this it can be send to factories,” the passive form is incorrect; “can be sent” is needed. The opening also shifts awkwardly between “we need” and “it can,” while “after 12 months we can harvest our crop” does not clearly express the diagram’s stated period. Punctuation and sentence boundaries are inconsistent, with several long sequences joined mainly by commas or “and.” Practise accurate passive constructions and use shorter, complete sentences to describe each stage before attempting more complex links.

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