Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given picture illustrates the production process of sugar from sugar cane.

Overall, it can be seen that the process of making sugar is linear process. It consist of several seven steps including growing, harvesting, crushing, purifying juice, evaporator, centrifuge and drying and cooling.

Initially, it is start from growing, farmers growing the sugar cane into soil between 12 to 18 months until maturity. Once fully grown, it harvested by machine or by people after this process, it is passed through crushing process and sugar can turn into juice.

In the next stage, this juice purifying by a limestone filter. After purification process, juice placed into container for evaporating on high temperature and juice change into syrup. Continue with centrifuge process, sugar crystals separated from syrup.

Finally, sugar drying and cooling in a container. And it is ready for packing and marketing.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover the main stages in the correct order, from growing the cane for 12–18 months through harvesting, crushing, purification, evaporation, centrifuging, and drying and cooling. The overview identifies the process as linear and names its stages, while details such as the limestone filter and the separation of crystals from syrup show relevant selection. However, some stages are less fully described: for example, the diagram shows juice being heated in an evaporator, but “on high temperature” is vague, and the final claim that the sugar is ready for “packing and marketing” is not shown. The response is also 142 words, below the required 150. Add a little more accurate detail about the machinery and outputs to complete the summary.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The response has a clear overall progression and is divided into an introduction, an overview, and stages presented in sequence. Time and sequence markers such as “Initially,” “In the next stage,” and “Finally” help the reader follow the process, and the stages are generally grouped sensibly. Some linking is less smooth, however: “Once fully grown, it harvested by machine or by people after this process, it is passed…” joins several steps in a confusing way. The repeated use of “process” and the abrupt final sentence beginning “And” also weaken the flow. Use clearer sentence boundaries and refer back to the material consistently—for example, distinguish the cane, juice, syrup, and crystals as each moves through the stages.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of process vocabulary, including “limestone filter,” “evaporating,” “syrup,” and “sugar crystals,” which makes the main stages understandable. There is also some useful variation in describing the sequence. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward, such as “farmers growing the sugar cane into soil,” “sugar can turn into juice,” and “juice purifying by a limestone filter.” “Evaporator” is also used as a stage name where a verb phrase would be more natural. These choices do not prevent understanding, but they limit precision. Aim for standard process descriptions such as “the cane is crushed to extract juice” and “the juice is purified through a limestone filter,” and avoid adding unsupported details like marketing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a time clause in “Once fully grown” and a sequence of stages linked across sentences. However, grammatical control is uneven, and errors occur in several sentence patterns. Examples include “It consist” instead of “It consists,” “it is start from growing” instead of “it starts with growing,” and “it harvested” instead of “it is harvested.” Passive forms are especially important for describing this process, but forms such as “this juice purifying” and “juice placed into container” are incomplete. There are also problems with articles and sentence boundaries, as in “a linear process” and the comma splice in the harvesting sentence. Practise accurate passive constructions and check each sentence for a subject and finite verb.

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