Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given diagram showcases in information pertaining to the procedure which sugar is produce by sugar cane.

Overall it can be observed at a glance, there are seven stages in the process ,beginning with progressing of sugar and until of final step as product.Moreever the most important step in this process is harvesting of sugar cane at time

At first step of seeding of sugarcane into feild and take care of it until the time period of full growth which take 12 to 18 months .Now this sugar is ready for next step which cutting or harvesting it can be done both maually by worker or harvesting with agriculture machines. The third step contain of crushing of sugar cane to extract the juice . This juice need to purify to remove impurities which is a fourth step. Then heating process of juice is now started to

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the process as having seven stages and include the 12–18-month growing period and both harvesting methods, which are relevant details. However, the response is only a partial account: it stops at “Then heating process of juice is now started to” and does not report the later stages of evaporation into syrup, separation of sugar crystals in a centrifuge, or drying and cooling. The overview is also unclear and includes the unsupported claim that harvesting is “the most important step.” The response contains 146 words, so it does not meet the 150-word minimum. To improve, give a concise overview of the complete sequence and describe the final stages accurately, without ranking a stage unless the diagram supports that judgement.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some basic organisation: the response begins with an introduction and overview, then uses “At first step” and “The third step” to move through the process. This gives the reader a partial sense of sequence. However, the progression breaks off mid-sentence at the heating stage, and the overview is difficult to follow (“beginning with progressing of sugar and until of final step as product”). Several ideas are crowded into one paragraph, while spacing and punctuation are inconsistent. Use separate paragraphs for the overview and the stage-by-stage account, and connect each stage with clear sequencing language such as “Next,” “After purification,” and “Finally.” Ensure the account reaches the end of the process.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant process vocabulary, including “harvesting,” “crushing,” “extract the juice,” and “purify,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, word choice and spelling errors are frequent enough to make parts awkward or unclear: “showcases in information,” “seeding,” “feild,” and “maually” are examples. Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “progressing of sugar” and “at time.” Aim for precise terms from the diagram, including “sugar cane,” “evaporate,” “syrup,” “centrifuge,” and “sugar crystals.” Check spelling and use natural collocations; for example, say that cane is “grown” and then “harvested,” rather than describing it as “seeding” or “progressing.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple and longer sentences, and the sequence is sometimes expressed through clauses, as in “which take 12 to 18 months.” However, the range is limited and errors occur frequently, sometimes making the meaning difficult to interpret. Examples include “the procedure which sugar is produce,” “there are seven stages in the process ,beginning,” and “This juice need to purify.” These show problems with clause construction, verb forms, agreement, and articles. The final sentence is incomplete, ending with “to,” which also prevents the process description from being grammatically complete. Practise accurate passive forms for process descriptions—for example, “the juice is purified” and “the syrup is heated”—and check each sentence for a complete verb and clear punctuation.

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