Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The whole process which is described below in the diagram are the steps used for the creation of sugar from sugar cane . It widely explained the whole process from growing suger cane to getting our final outcome in the form of sugar .

It starts with the sugar cane which took almost 12 to 18 months to get ready for being harvested . Farmers grow sugar canes in their fields and let them grow properly for 12 to 18 months . Then they got harvested . The process of harvesting sugar canes can be taken in 2 steps by hands with the help of some sort of sharp instrument or by machine .

After harvesting the sugar canes , They pass through crusher which separates juice from them . Then jucie passes through limestone filter which purify the juice . The purified form of juice got heated to get it in a syrup form . Then sugar crystals got separated form the syrup .

At last the crystals of sugar are put in phase where they dry and cool . After this process the final output is our sugar

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover the main stages in the correct order, including the 12–18-month growing period, the two harvesting methods, crushing, filtering, heating, separation and final drying and cooling. This gives the reader a relevant account of the process. However, the overview is not clearly separated from the stage-by-stage description, and some details are less fully reported: for example, the diagram identifies an evaporator and a centrifuge, but you describe these mainly as actions without naming the equipment. The opening also repeats the idea of describing the process rather than summarising its overall structure. To strengthen the response, give a concise overview of the sequence and identify the key transformation from cane to juice, syrup and sugar crystals.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall progression, moving from growing and harvesting through processing to the finished sugar. Paragraph breaks also help distinguish the early, middle and final stages, and sequencing words such as “Then” and “At last” guide the reader. This meets the lower-band expectation of coherent arrangement and shows some of the clearer progression associated with the next level. However, links are sometimes repetitive, and the final paragraph begins “After this process” without a particularly precise reference. The opening repeats “whole process” and does not provide a distinct overview. Use a wider range of concise stage links, and organise the introduction around the process’s overall sequence before describing the stages.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant process vocabulary, including “harvested,” “crusher,” “limestone filter,” “syrup,” and “crystals,” so the main meaning is generally clear. There is also some attempt to describe technical stages rather than relying entirely on everyday language. However, noticeable spelling and word-choice errors reduce precision: “suger” and “jucie” are misspelled, while “creation” and “final outcome” are less natural choices for this process. Phrases such as “put in phase where they dry and cool” are awkward and make the final stage less clear. Aim for accurate spelling and standard process collocations, such as “production,” “the juice is purified,” and “the crystals are dried and cooled.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more developed sentences, and the sequence is usually understandable. However, errors in agreement, tense, articles and sentence construction are frequent enough to limit accuracy. For example, “The whole process … are the steps” has a singular–plural mismatch, and “which took almost 12 to 18 months” uses an unsuitable verb form for describing the growing stage. In “Then they got harvested,” the pronoun reference is unclear, while “the purified form of juice got heated” is an awkward passive construction. Punctuation spacing is also inconsistent. Practise accurate passive forms for process descriptions, such as “The canes are harvested” and “The juice is heated,” and check agreement and articles in each sentence.

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