Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given diagram illustrates the seven-step of manufacturing of sugar. It start's from growing the crop process to till final product. There is a aslo two methods are shown of harvesting.One is physical and other one is machined based.

The process begins from the growing of sugar cane. The average cultivation period lies between 12 to 18 months. Then second step is started. The harvesting depends on farmer choice and there resources. The first group cuts with the help of machine and other used traditional method with their hands.

After that the crushing is done through crusher. The sugar cane is placed from one side and on other side the nectar of the product is collected. The jucice is purified with limestone filter to remove dirt and extra debris in nectar. Then the product transfered to the boiler and heated at maximum temperature. Through this step the juice turns into thick and purified syrup. Actually the viscocity of the jucice is increased. After that the spinning begins to syrup spins at fixed rpm.

In this sugar is sperated from the the syrup. In the last last and most awaited step the sugar is obatined and it's dry and cools at normal room temperature.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You cover the main stages in the correct order, including the 12–18-month growing period, the two harvesting methods, crushing, limestone filtration, evaporation, separation and final drying and cooling. This gives the reader a relevant account of the process. However, the opening does not provide a clear, concise overview of the process as a whole, and some details are inaccurate or unsupported: the diagram does not say that harvesting depends on farmers’ choices or resources, that the juice is heated at a maximum temperature, or that the centrifuge spins at a fixed rpm. The final stage is also described as sugar being obtained and then drying, rather than clearly identifying drying and cooling as the last stage. Select only details shown and summarise the overall transformation from cane to sugar more clearly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response is arranged in a generally logical sequence, moving from cultivation through processing to the finished sugar. Paragraph breaks also help separate the introduction from the process description. Linking phrases such as “Then,” “After that” and “In the last” make the order easy to follow, although their repeated use makes the progression somewhat mechanical. Some references are unclear, particularly “In this sugar is sperated from the the syrup,” where “this” does not clearly identify the centrifuge stage. The opening also combines several ideas abruptly. To improve, group related stages into clearer paragraphs and use precise references, such as “The syrup then enters a centrifuge, where sugar crystals are separated.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant process vocabulary, including “cultivation period,” “limestone filter,” “crusher” and “syrup,” which helps communicate the stages. There is also some attempt at more specific language, such as “viscocity” and “fixed rpm,” though the latter adds information not shown in the diagram. Several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or informal: “nectar of the product” is not suitable for cane juice, “physical” does not clearly describe manual harvesting, and “most awaited step” is inappropriate in an objective report. Spelling errors such as “jucice,” “sperated” and “obatined” are noticeable. Use standard process terms consistently and check spelling; for example, describe “juice” being “filtered” and “sugar crystals” being “separated.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, and the sequence is usually understandable. However, grammatical errors are frequent enough to make some sentences awkward or unclear. Examples include “The given diagram illustrates the seven-step,” where the noun form should be plural, and “It start's,” which has incorrect agreement and punctuation. Other problems include “There is a aslo two methods are shown” and “The product transfered to the boiler,” which lack correct sentence structure or verb forms. The final sentence also shifts awkwardly between “the sugar is obatined” and “it's dry and cools.” Practise forming complete clauses with consistent tense and subject–verb agreement, and proofread articles, plurals and punctuation. A clearer pattern is: “The juice is heated until it becomes syrup.”

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