Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The diagram illustrate the manufactring process for maki8ng sugar from sygar cane . i explain the manufactring process sugar can produce the suger . This is a long process but i m discribe.

Overall, first step sugar canes cut and suger is crusing and redy to juice a nd juice is put the filltring machine and juice is heating and redy syurp and finally your sugar is raedy.

firstely, the sugar canes growing time till the 12/18 months . Next the suger canes harvasting withs machines .But some peoples are not a machines used humas cuts the suger canes . Next the suger canes put the curshing machine and suger canes change the liqued and next step the suger canes juice put up the limestone filter and juice is growthone . Your juice is fillter and clean.

Next the sugr canes juice put the evaporator this machine is working and your juice is change the syrup . This syrup process is juice put the machine . And this is a very high tamprature heat and this suger syrup is ready. Next the suger syrup is put the centrifuge machine and this suger syrup is roling and syrup is conwert the sugar . And last step sugar are put the cool place and your sugar is drying and cooling.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover the main stages in the correct general order, from growing the cane for 12–18 months through harvesting, crushing, filtering, evaporation, centrifuging, and drying and cooling. The overview also recognises that this is a multi-stage process and that the juice becomes syrup before sugar is produced. However, some details are unclear or inaccurate: “juice is growthone” does not explain that limestone is used to filter the juice, and the centrifuge separates sugar crystals from syrup rather than simply converting syrup into sugar. The two harvesting methods are mentioned, but the distinction could be stated more clearly. To strengthen the report, describe each stage precisely and include a concise overview of the process’s key transformations.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs describing the stages. Sequencing words such as “firstly,” “Next,” and “last step” help the reader follow the process. However, progression is often mechanical, with “Next” repeated, and several sentences repeat information or do not connect clearly—for example, “This syrup process is juice put the machine.” References such as “your juice” and “this machine” also make it difficult to identify the material or stage being discussed. Use clearer links that show cause and sequence, and organise the stages into complete, connected sentences. More precise references to “the juice,” “the syrup,” and “the crystals” would improve continuity.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant process vocabulary, including “harvesting,” “limestone filter,” “evaporator,” “centrifuge,” and “drying and cooling.” These terms show awareness of the diagram’s stages. However, spelling errors and inaccurate word choices are frequent enough to make parts of the description difficult to understand, as in “manufactring,” “sygar,” “crusing,” and “growthone.” Some expressions are also imprecise or unnatural, such as “juice is growthone” and “sugar syrup is roling.” Aim to learn the spelling and meaning of the key process terms, and use straightforward, accurate verbs such as “filter,” “heat,” “separate,” and “dry.” This would make the limited vocabulary more effective and clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and the response generally follows the process sequence. However, control of sentence structure and basic grammar is weak, so meaning is sometimes unclear. For example, “The diagram illustrate” has subject–verb disagreement, while “the sugar canes growing time till the 12/18 months” lacks a clear grammatical structure. Articles, verb forms, and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent, as in “sugar canes put the curshing machine” and “this suger syrup is ready.” To improve, practise forming complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use consistent present simple passive forms for the process, such as “The cane is crushed” and “The juice is heated.” Check agreement and punctuation when editing.

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