Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The diagram illustrate the seven stage of manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Overview, It can be clearly seen that first process is growing sugar cane.wheras the last process is drying and cooling.

To begin, growing sugar cane between 12 to 18 months,then sencond process cut the sugar cane and afther that the third process the sugar canes crushing down with a machines and make a juice. Morever the forth process is started the juice goes to purifying juice and limestone filter the juice and after that they go to evaporator and the give them heat furthermore the come to sixth process centrifuge they separate sugar crystals from syrup and they rotate the circulas form and then they reache to last process draying and cooling and then made sugar.

Conclusion, The sugar made from sugar can and this have seven stages. when the process this seven stages after that sugar made.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the process as having seven stages and give a basic overview by naming growing as the first stage and drying and cooling as the last. You also mention the 12–18-month growing period and several central steps, including crushing, purification, evaporation and centrifuging. However, the account is only partial and some details are unclear: harvesting is described as cutting, but the two methods shown—mechanical and manual—are omitted, and the final separation and drying stages are not explained clearly. The response is also 5 words below the 150-word minimum. To strengthen coverage, report the main stages precisely and explain how the juice becomes syrup before crystals are separated and dried.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

There is a recognisable sequence, supported by markers such as “To begin,” “after that,” and “last process,” so the reader can follow the broad direction of the process. The opening and overview are separated from the main description, but the body is largely one long chain of events, and the concluding sentence repeats the overview rather than adding useful information. Several transitions are awkward or unclear, for example “Morever the forth process is started” and “then they reache to last process.” Organise the stages into clearer sentences or paragraphs and use linking expressions selectively. Clearer references to the juice, syrup and crystals would also make the progression easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant process vocabulary, including “limestone filter,” “evaporator,” “centrifuge,” “sugar crystals,” and “syrup,” which helps convey the subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or forms make the description difficult to interpret, such as “the sugar canes crushing down with a machines,” “circulas form,” and “draying.” Repetition of “process” and “sugar cane” also reduces precision. Aim to use accurate verbs for each stage and check spelling and collocations. For example, describe cane being crushed to extract juice, then say the juice is heated until it becomes syrup; this is clearer and more natural for a process report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to connect several stages in longer sentences, but sentence structures are limited and frequently inaccurate, which sometimes makes relationships between steps unclear. Examples include “The diagram illustrate,” “first process is growing,” and “they separate sugar crystals from syrup,” where agreement, articles or reference need attention. Verb forms are also inconsistent: “growing sugar cane between 12 to 18 months” needs a complete clause, while “the give them heat” does not form a clear grammatical sentence. Punctuation is often missing after introductory phrases, producing run-on sentences. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with clauses such as “After the juice is purified, it is heated to form syrup.”

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