Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The diagrams illustrate the step and equipment involved in producing sugar and the way in which sugarcane is used to make sugar.

Overall,sugarcane is involved in seven stage before sugar loaded in bucket.

In the first stage of making sugar, sugarcane is grown in field which take twelve to eighteen month to harvest. Secondlty, sugarcane either can be harvest with equipment or by human envolvement.Sugarcane is put in the jucie making machine in third stage where juice are collected in the bucket.

In the next stage of production, extracted sugarcane juice is purified by passing through limestone filter to remove unwanted impurities. The clean juice is then transfered to evaporator where constant heat is given in the tank,which helps to vaporized the water from juice and thick liquid sugar syrup is extracted. Subsequently, this syrup is palced in centrifuge machine, where rapid spinning separates sugar crystals from syrup.Finally, isolated crystals are placed in the containers fro drying and cooling, resulting fine sugar is ready for packaging and distribution.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover the main stages in the correct order, from growing and harvesting through crushing, purification, evaporation, centrifuging, and drying. The overview identifies a seven-stage process, and useful details include the 12–18-month growing period and the two harvesting methods. This gives the reader a clear account of how the process works. Some details, however, go beyond what the diagram shows: it does not state that the filter removes impurities, that water vaporises, or that the final sugar is packaged and distributed. The overview’s phrase “sugar loaded in bucket” is also unclear and does not capture the process’s main transformation from cane to sugar. Keep the account closely tied to visible information and describe the final product without adding unsupported steps.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response is arranged in a sensible sequence, with an overview followed by stages grouped into paragraphs. Connectors such as “In the first stage,” “In the next stage,” “Subsequently,” and “Finally” help the reader follow the process. The progression is generally clear, though the repeated stage-by-stage framing can feel mechanical. Some links between ideas are also unclear: “Overall,sugarcane is involved in seven stage before sugar loaded in bucket” does not clearly express the overview, and the transition from the centrifuge to the final drying stage could be more precise. Use paragraphing to distinguish the initial stages from the later processing, and make references such as “this syrup” and “isolated crystals” unambiguous.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant process vocabulary, including “limestone filter,” “evaporator,” “centrifuge,” and “sugar crystals,” which helps convey the technical stages. There is also some variety in verbs such as “collected,” “purified,” and “separates.” However, spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable, including “Secondlty,” “envolvement,” “jucie,” “palced,” and “fro.” Some combinations are also unnatural or imprecise: “sugar loaded in bucket,” “juice making machine,” and “fine sugar is ready” do not describe the process as naturally as they could. Aim for accurate process collocations and check spelling carefully; this will make the description more precise and easier to read.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including a relative clause in “where rapid spinning separates sugar crystals from syrup” and a sequence of linked clauses describing evaporation. The overall meaning is usually recoverable, but errors in agreement, articles, verb forms, and punctuation occur across the response. For example, “sugarcane is involved in seven stage” needs plural agreement, while “which take twelve to eighteen month” has errors in the verb and noun number. In “juice are collected,” the subject and verb do not agree; “is then transfered” also needs a correct past participle. Commas and spaces are missing in places, such as “tank,which.” Review agreement and verb forms, and break up the longest sentence to improve control.

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