Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The picture illustrates various steps to produce sugar from sugar cane.

Overall, there are 7 stages of this process. For the first 3 steps consist of mechanical processes from cutting sugar cane using hand or machine vehicle to crushing the sugar cane using mechanical machine. The latter steps are chemical process that convert into sugar from the initial substance.

First and foremost, the sugar canes needs to grow from 12 to 18 months and then it harvest from the ground using 2 techniques: human hand and machcine tools. After receiving the sugar canes, it is crushed using a mechanical process and removed as juice.

The subsequent processes are simple from purify the the juice using limestone filter to evaporate using heat to form syrup. Centrifuge stage, where syrup rotated in a container, helps to extract the sugar crystals that contained in syrup. The last step incorporates drying and cooling the sugar crystals extracted from syrap.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The response covers the main stages and gives a clear overview that the process has seven steps, moving from mechanical preparation to later processing. It accurately includes the 12–18-month growing period, the two harvesting methods, crushing, limestone filtration, heating to make syrup, centrifuging, and final drying and cooling. This makes the account relevant and generally informative. However, the overview is not fully precise: describing the later stages as “chemical process” is not clearly supported by the diagram, which shows physical operations such as filtering, heating, and separation. Some details are also under-developed, particularly what the centrifuge separates. State explicitly that it separates sugar crystals from the remaining syrup, and make the overview describe the process more accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The information is arranged in a sensible sequence, with an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs that move from growing and harvesting to processing and the final product. Sequencing phrases such as “First and foremost,” “After receiving,” and “The subsequent processes” help the reader follow the stages. The progression is clear overall, though some linking is mechanical or awkward: “The subsequent processes are simple from purify…” does not connect the stages naturally, and “For the first 3 steps consist…” disrupts the overview’s flow. Use more direct transitions, such as “After harvesting, the cane is crushed,” and ensure each sentence has a clear grammatical subject. This would make cohesion smoother and referencing more precise.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

The response uses an adequate range of process vocabulary, including “crushed,” “limestone filter,” “evaporate,” “syrup,” “centrifuge,” and “sugar crystals.” These terms help convey the sequence, and the writer attempts some less common language. However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for this diagram: “chemical process” is an imprecise label, “mechanical machine” is redundant, and “syrup rotated” does not describe the separation clearly. There are also spelling errors, including “machcine” and “syrap,” and repetition of “sugar cane.” Choose precise process verbs and collocations, and proofread spelling; for example, describe the centrifuge as separating crystals from syrup rather than simply rotating syrup.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

There is some variety in sentence structure, including a relative clause in “Centrifuge stage, where syrup rotated in a container,” and most stages remain understandable. However, errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence construction prevent consistently clear control. For example, “the sugar canes needs to grow” should use a plural subject with “need,” while “then it harvest” needs a passive form such as “it is harvested.” The overview fragment “For the first 3 steps consist…” also lacks a sound sentence structure, and “from purify the the juice” has an incorrect verb pattern and a repeated article. Practise accurate passive constructions for process descriptions and check each sentence for a complete subject–verb structure.

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