Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The pictorial view shows that raw product of sugar can convert into edible sugar form it may takes seven step of manufacturing process.

Overall, sugar canes are processing and take different step after that it had been convert in dry and cool form of suggar.

As per seen, sugar cane had grown and take 12 to 18 month of time. Afterthat, with help of tractor and different equipment it had crop. It means process reached to second stage. Moreover, in third stage it may crush by crusher and liquid juice came out in bottom tray. Furthermore, it had been clear and filter by limestone funnel. In fifth stage extra water heated by heat and it may evaporat and only syrup were present. It had starting of sixth stage into that step one of the process separates sugar crystal from syrup. In the final step white crystal in square shape had been present which calls a dying and cooling sugar.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover the main sequence from growing through harvesting, crushing, filtering, evaporation and separation, and you correctly include the 12–18-month growing period and both harvesting methods. The overview also identifies the process as a series of stages ending in drying and cooling. However, some details are unclear or inaccurate: the diagram shows juice passing through a limestone filter, not a “limestone funnel,” and the final stage is drying and cooling the sugar, rather than producing “white crystal in square shape.” The centrifuge’s role—separating sugar crystals from syrup—is mentioned, but could be explained more clearly. To strengthen the response, give a concise overview of the process’s start and end, then describe each stage precisely using the diagram’s labels.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response follows the diagram’s sequence, and the use of “Overall,” “Afterthat,” “Moreover,” and “Furthermore” helps signal progression. The stages are generally presented in the right order, so the reader can follow the process. However, the paragraphing is limited, and several transitions feel mechanical rather than showing the relationship between stages. Phrases such as “It means process reached to second stage” interrupt the description without adding useful information, while “In fifth stage” and “In the final step” could be linked more smoothly to the preceding steps. Organise the response into a brief overview and a process description, and use clear references such as “the resulting juice” and “the syrup” to connect stages.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant process vocabulary, including “crusher,” “juice,” “limestone,” “evaporat[e],” “syrup,” and “sugar crystal,” which helps convey the diagram’s subject. However, word choice and spelling are often inaccurate or unnatural, sometimes making the meaning difficult to interpret. For example, “raw product of sugar,” “it had crop,” and “a dying and cooling sugar” do not express the intended ideas clearly; “sugar cane” and “sugar” are also inconsistently formed or spelled. Several phrases repeat general words such as “step” and “process” instead of naming the action. Build a more precise set of process verbs and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, and the sequence is mostly understandable despite some grammatical errors. However, control of verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence construction is inconsistent. Examples include “sugar can convert,” “it may takes,” “sugar canes are processing,” and “only syrup were present”; these need more accurate forms such as “sugar is produced,” “it may take,” “the sugar cane is processed,” and “only syrup remained.” Some clauses are also awkwardly joined, as in “In fifth stage extra water heated by heat.” Practise describing processes with passive structures and consistent present simple forms, for example, “The cane is crushed, and the juice is collected.” This will make the stages clearer and more controlled.

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