Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The diagram illustrates the manufacturing process for sugar from sugar cane.

Overall, it is noticeable that the manufacturing of sugar includes sevral stages. The process begins with the growing of sugarcane, passes through multiple stages and it ends with drying and cooling the sugar.

It is evident that there is series of steps for manufacturing the sugar. Initially, the sugarcane is planted and approximately after 12 to 18 months, the crop is ready for harvesting. After harvesting the the crops, the sugarcane are crushed to extract juice then this juice is purified in limestone filter. When the juice is filtered, it passes through the evaporator in which this juice become syrup. After the manufacturing of syrup, it centrifuge in a spinner for the crystallization of suger. This syrup is bought into the container and then starts the drying and cooling of sugar.

A closer look reveals that it is dried and packed and ready to transport.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the process as a sequence and give a relevant overview: it starts with growing sugar cane and ends with drying and cooling. The main stages are mostly reported in the correct order, including harvesting, crushing, filtering, evaporation and centrifuging. This covers the task well, but some details are unclear or inaccurate. For example, the diagram shows sugar crystals being separated from syrup in the centrifuge, not simply “for the crystallization of sugar,” and it does not show the product being packed or transported. The final sentence therefore adds unsupported information. To strengthen the response, describe the separation of crystals and syrup accurately and avoid adding stages that are not shown.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall arrangement, moving from an introduction and overview to a chronological account of the stages. Sequencing expressions such as “Initially,” “After harvesting,” and “When the juice is filtered” help the reader follow the process. However, the overview repeats the idea that there are multiple stages without summarising the key transformation from cane to juice, syrup and sugar. The final paragraph also feels detached from the preceding account, and its claim about packing and transport disrupts the process description. Some links are mechanical or unclear, particularly “After the manufacturing of syrup, it centrifuge.” A more focused overview and clearer links between each stage would make progression smoother.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a suitable range of process vocabulary, including “harvesting,” “crushed,” “purified,” “evaporator,” and “centrifuge,” which helps communicate the main stages. There are also attempts at more specific wording, such as “limestone filter” and “crystallization.” However, several word-choice, collocation and spelling problems reduce precision: “it centrifuge in a spinner” is not a natural description, “bought into the container” appears to mean “put,” and “suger” is misspelled. “Manufacturing” and “process” are also repeated where more precise alternatives could describe the transformations. Aim to use accurate process collocations and check spelling, especially for key technical terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a time clause (“After harvesting…”) and a relative clause (“in which this juice become syrup”). The sequence remains generally understandable, but some grammatical errors affect accuracy. Examples include “there is series of steps” (missing an article), “the sugarcane are crushed” (agreement), “this juice become syrup” (verb form), and “it centrifuge” (missing an appropriate passive construction). The repeated “the” in “After harvesting the the crops” and inconsistent sentence control also need attention. Practise describing processes with passive forms, for example, “the cane is crushed” and “the juice is heated,” while checking articles and subject–verb agreement.

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