Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The diagram illustrates that how the sugar is produced from sugar cane.

Overall, the process diagram contains seven stages. Intially, the sugar canes grow 12 -18 months and end with the process of drying and cooling and converted into sugar.

In stage one, the sugar canes is grown 12 to 18 months, In stage two, it is harvested by two methods; from machines and by humans. In step three, there is a machine in which sugar canes are crushing and as a result it made juice.

After taking juice there is a filter named for limestone filter, which purify juice and send it to further procedure. In the fifth stage, the juice is heated in an evaporator until it becomes syrup. In the 6th stage, some particles of sugar is being seprated from syrup by centrifuge. In the final stage, after seprating sugar crystals, there is a container in which syrup is dried and cooled. After cooling and drying the sugar canes converted into sugar.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover the process from growing through to drying and cooling, and your overview correctly identifies seven stages and the 12–18-month growing period. You also include the two harvesting methods and explain the main transformations from cane to juice, then syrup and sugar. Some details, however, are unclear or inaccurate: the centrifuge separates sugar crystals from syrup, rather than simply separating “some particles,” and the final stage dries and cools the sugar crystals, not the syrup. The overview could also summarise the process more precisely by stating that it is a linear sequence from cultivation to finished sugar. Overall, the main features are relevant, but a few are less fully or accurately reported.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction and overview are followed by stages in sequence, with transitions such as “In stage two,” “In the fifth stage,” and “In the final stage.” This makes the process easy to follow and shows a coherent progression. The paragraphing is appropriate, and the sequence is generally logical. Some linking and reference are less smooth, however. For example, “After taking juice” is an awkward transition, while “it” in “it is harvested” and “it made juice” does not always refer clearly to the cane or the machine. The repeated stage-by-stage framing is understandable but somewhat mechanical. More natural links between the transformations would make the cohesion more flexible.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a suitable range of process vocabulary, including “harvested,” “limestone filter,” “evaporator,” “syrup,” and “centrifuge.” These terms help communicate the stages, and the meaning is generally clear. There are some inaccurate or awkward choices, though: “from machines” would be more naturally expressed as “mechanically,” and “some particles of sugar” does not precisely describe sugar crystals being separated from syrup. “Container” is also less specific than the equipment shown at the drying and cooling stage. Spelling errors such as “Intially” and “seprated” reduce accuracy, while repeated use of “stage” and “process” limits variety. Aim for precise process collocations and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex forms, including the overview sentence and the clause “until it becomes syrup.” The sequence remains understandable despite some grammatical errors. These include the unnecessary “that” in “illustrates that how,” subject–verb agreement in “the sugar canes is grown,” and the faulty construction “it made juice.” There are also problems with passive forms and sentence boundaries, as in “sugar canes are crushing,” and the comma splice and capitalisation in “12 to 18 months, In stage two.” The final sentence also has an unclear grammatical subject. Work on consistent passive constructions for describing processes, agreement, and punctuation; these changes would make your range more controlled.

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