Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The picture below explain the procedure of producing sugar from sugarcane on industrial scale.

Overall, the whole process consists of seven steps. Firstly, the sugar cane plants were planted in the soil, juice was seprated , and lastly after drying and cooling sugar was formed.

This whole process was started with plantation of suger cane plants, after growing for 12 to 18 months these plants were harvested by farmers with the help of mecanical equipments. The sugar canes were then crushed to seprate their juice, then the juice is passed through the limestone filter for purification, the juice is then heated at high temperature in boilers, water evaporates and the juice is converted into syrup. Then it centrifuges and the sugar crystals were seprated from syrup. Lastly, after drying and cooling these crystals were turned in to sugar which is then used by people for different puroses especially in sweets.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover the main sequence and include the key duration of 12 to 18 months, as well as the crushing, limestone filtration, heating, centrifuging, and final drying and cooling stages. The overview also identifies the process as having seven steps. However, some details are less fully or accurately reported: the diagram shows harvesting by either a mechanical harvester or by hand, whereas you say the canes are harvested by farmers with mechanical equipment. The final comment about sugar being used in sweets is not shown and is unnecessary. The overview could more clearly summarise the transformation from cane to juice, syrup, crystals, and finished sugar, rather than saying only that juice is separated and sugar is formed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall progression, moving from cultivation through processing to the finished product, and the opening overview helps orient the reader. Sequencing words such as “Firstly,” “then,” and “Lastly” make the order easy to follow. This is a coherent arrangement, though the linking is somewhat repetitive and mechanical, particularly in the long process description, where “then” and “the juice is then” recur. The overview’s phrase “juice was separated” is also vague and does not clearly connect the stages. To strengthen progression, group the stages into clearer phases and use more precise references, for example, “After harvesting, the stalks are crushed” and “The resulting syrup is then spun in a centrifuge.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant process vocabulary, including “limestone filter,” “purification,” “evaporates,” “syrup,” “centrifuges,” and “crystals,” which allows the reader to understand the production stages. There is some range, but several spelling errors and imprecise or unnatural choices reduce control: “seprated,” “mecanical,” “suger,” and “puroses” are misspelled, while “plantation of sugar cane plants” is awkwardly repetitive. “Boilers” and “high temperature” add details not specified in the diagram, so prefer neutral wording such as “heated” or “heated in an evaporator.” Use accurate process collocations and check spelling carefully; this would make the description more precise and fluent without requiring more specialised vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex forms, including the time clause “after growing for 12 to 18 months” and a sequence of linked process clauses. The stages remain understandable, but some grammatical errors occur. The opening should be “The picture below explains,” and the overview shifts awkwardly between past and present forms (“were planted,” “juice was separated,” “sugar was formed”). Process descriptions are usually clearer in the present simple, for example, “the canes are crushed” and “the juice is heated.” The sentence beginning “This whole process was started…” also has an unclear construction, and “Then it centrifuges” has an unclear subject. Use consistent present-tense passive forms and make each stage’s subject explicit to improve accuracy and control.

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