Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In this picture we will describe the process of making suger form suger cane. First, suger cane grows around 12 to 18th months. when he grows very well people cut this which is we can say harvest. Some people harvest suger cane with machince or some people cut with their hands. After this suger cane crush in the machine and we will recieve the suger cane juice. next step people purify juice in the limestone filter. after this filtration, they do hot juice with fire or hight flame and juice becomes syrup with the evaporation. When juice becomes syrup, they seperate crystals of suger from syrup. And this is the second last step of making suger form suger cane. and the last, they dry suger with cooling. Therefore this is the whole process of making suger form suger cane.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You cover the main sequence, including the 12–18-month growing period, both harvesting methods, crushing, filtering, evaporation, separation and final drying and cooling. However, the account is mostly a list of actions rather than a clear summary of the process’s overall features; an overview identifying the transformation from cane to juice, syrup and sugar would make the key stages clearer. Some details are imprecise: “they do hot juice with fire” does not clearly explain that heat is applied in an evaporator, and the centrifuge’s role in separating crystals from syrup could be stated more accurately. The response is also 11 words below the required minimum, so it does not fully meet the task’s length requirement. Add a concise overview and a little more precise process detail.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The stages are generally presented in the correct order, and sequencing expressions such as “First,” “After this,” and “the last” help the reader follow the process. This gives the response some organisation. However, it is written as one continuous paragraph, and the repeated use of “after this” and “and” makes the progression mechanical. Some links are unclear, particularly “When juice becomes syrup, they seperate crystals…” followed by “And this is the second last step,” which interrupts the process description. Use a separate overview and a body paragraph, and vary the transitions with phrases such as “The resulting juice is then…” or “Once the syrup has formed…”. Clearer sentence boundaries would also improve the flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use several relevant process terms, including “harvest,” “limestone filter,” “evaporation,” “syrup” and “crystals,” so the reader can identify the main stages. However, the vocabulary range is limited and some word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which occasionally makes the description difficult to understand. For example, “do hot juice with fire” is not a natural way to describe heating the juice, while “cut this” is vague for harvesting cane. Spelling errors are frequent, including “suger,” “form,” “machince,” “recieve” and “seperate.” Learn the correct forms of key process vocabulary and use precise verbs such as “extract,” “filter,” “heat” and “separate” to describe each stage.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response mainly uses simple sentences and attempts a few longer structures, such as “When juice becomes syrup, they seperate crystals of suger from syrup.” However, errors occur frequently and sometimes make relationships between actions unclear. Examples include “suger cane grows around 12 to 18th months,” “After this suger cane crush in the machine,” and “they do hot juice,” where verb forms and sentence construction are faulty. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent: “when” begins a sentence in lowercase, and several sentences start with “And.” Practise accurate present-simple passive forms for process descriptions, for example, “The cane is crushed” and “The juice is heated,” and check articles, verb forms and sentence boundaries.

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