Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The diagram illustrates the method of producing sugar from sugar cane. In total, there are seven significant stages in this manufacturing process.

An anlaysis of diagram indicates that sugar cane grows for 12-18 months, then it is harvested with the help of man and equipment in the first two stages.Then it is crushed by using machine to separate the juice from the cane after juice is purified by using limestone filter.

Further, the juice was boiled by placing in container by heat in the process of evaporation then it turns into syrup in the stage five, after that separates sugar crystals from the syrup and sent for the drying and cooling of the sugar in the next stages. And it will be send to retailers for sale.

Overall, the diagram depicts a complex, manual, manufacturing, time -consuming and cyclical process the beginning with sugarcane plants growth to ending with production of sugar. Then the process repeats.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover the main sequence and include several accurate details: the cane grows for 12–18 months, is harvested by people or machinery, then crushed, filtered, heated, separated in a centrifuge, and dried and cooled. This gives the reader a relevant account of the process. However, some points are unclear or unsupported. The claim that the process is “cyclical” and “repeats” is not shown in the diagram, and sending the sugar to retailers is also outside the information provided. The overview is present, but it would be stronger if it simply highlighted the linear progression from growing cane to finished sugar and the key transformation from juice to syrup and crystals.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has an identifiable introduction, process description and concluding overview, and the stages are generally presented in the correct order. Sequencing expressions such as “then,” “after that” and “Further” help show progression. However, the organisation is weakened by placing the overview at the end and by combining several stages in long sentences, particularly the sentence beginning “Further, the juice was boiled…”. The link between the centrifuge and the final drying stage is also difficult to follow because the sentence structure is incomplete. Some transitions feel mechanical, and “Overall” introduces a conclusion that repeats earlier information while adding an unsupported claim. Group the stages into clearer sentences and use linking words only where they clarify the sequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of process vocabulary, including “manufacturing process,” “limestone filter,” “evaporation,” “syrup” and “sugar crystals.” These terms make the stages recognisable, and the meaning is generally clear. There are, however, some inaccurate or awkward choices and spelling slips. “An anlaysis” is misspelled and unnatural in this context; “the diagram shows” is more direct. “Manual” does not accurately describe the whole process, since machinery is used, and “cyclical” is not supported by the diagram. Phrases such as “help of man and equipment” and “sent to retailers for sale” are imprecise or add information not shown. Aim for precise process collocations, such as “harvested by hand or machine” and “the crystals are dried and cooled.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, and the reader can usually understand the sequence. Some grammatical errors remain, especially in longer sentences. For example, “after that separates sugar crystals from the syrup and sent” lacks a clear subject and consistent verb structure; write “the centrifuge separates the crystals from the syrup, which are then sent for drying and cooling.” In “the process repeats,” the subject is unclear, while “the beginning with sugarcane plants growth” is not a complete, well-formed phrase. There are also tense and article issues in “the juice was boiled by placing in container by heat.” Use consistent present simple for a process description, and check sentence boundaries, articles and subject–verb links.

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