Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The diagram illustrate the preparing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Overall,how sugar is produced from sugar cane.There are seven stages entire which sugar is manufacture from sugar cane.

In detail,it is evident from that diagram,in first step is growing which take overall 12 to 18 months.Furthermore when the sugarcane reachs to its peak,then the next step is harvesting many people are cut by hand or machine.In addition,they further move for crushing and make juice from it.However,the fourth step is purifying juice it can filter through limestone paper,then it can spotless from unwanted materials and its become completly pure.In this liquid then its evaporates give it heat and this juice convert to syrup.So,the centrifuge separates sugar crystals from syrup,its become more natural as compare to before.Moreover,the last stage is drying and cooling and finally makes the natural sugar for our uses.This is overall making in a cycle,this complete cycle takes times and afterthats,manufacture sugars for our daily uses.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover the main stages in the correct order, from growing for 12–18 months through harvesting, crushing, purification, evaporation, centrifuging, and drying and cooling. The overview identifies that sugar production has seven stages, and several details—such as the two harvesting methods and the separation of crystals from syrup—are relevant. However, some stages are described less fully or inaccurately: the diagram shows juice passing through a limestone filter, not “limestone paper,” and it does not say the cane is harvested at its peak or that the final sugar is “natural.” The claim that the process is a cycle is also unsupported; it is a linear process. A more precise overview and closer reporting of the diagram would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an opening, an overview, and a paragraph describing the stages in sequence. Connectors such as “Furthermore,” “In addition,” and “Moreover” help signal progression, and the reader can generally follow the process. However, the overview repeats the opening rather than summarising the process’s main features, and some linking is mechanical or unclear. For example, “In this liquid then its evaporates” does not clearly connect the juice to the evaporation stage, while “So” and “However” do not express the relationships intended. The final sentence also introduces an unsupported cycle and repeats the idea of production. Use clearer stage-to-stage links and paragraphing that separates the overview from the detailed sequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “harvesting,” “crushing,” “purifying,” “evaporates,” “syrup,” and “centrifuge,” which allows you to describe the process. There are also attempts at more specific language, such as “separates sugar crystals from syrup.” However, several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unnatural: “preparing process,” “limestone paper,” “spotless from unwanted materials,” and “more natural as compare to before.” “Manufacture” is also used awkwardly as a verb in “sugar is manufacture.” These choices sometimes make the intended meaning less precise. Build a reliable set of process verbs and technical terms, and check that each word fits its context rather than adding unsupported descriptions such as “natural.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “when” and “which,” and the sequence is usually understandable. However, grammatical control is uneven. Examples include “The diagram illustrate,” “which sugar is manufacture,” and “the sugarcane reachs,” where agreement or verb forms are incorrect. Several sentences also have incomplete or awkward structures, such as “Overall, how sugar is produced from sugar cane” and “In detail, it is evident from that diagram, in first step is growing.” Punctuation and spacing after commas are inconsistent, and some long sentences join several stages without clear grammatical boundaries. Practise forming complete overview sentences and use consistent present simple passive forms, for example, “The juice is purified” and “The crystals are dried and cooled.”

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