Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The daigrame describes about the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

The manufacturing of sugar from sugar cane comprises of 7 steps.

Starting from the 1st step which involved the growing of sugar canes taking 12-18 months.When sugar canes are fully grown they are harvesting by using two methods either machine or by the manual harvesting.The 3rd step involves the crushing of sugar canes to produce the juice.After this in the 4rth step in which the extracted juice is purified by passing it through the limestone filter.Evaporator is used in the 5th step to evaporate the extra water and juice becomes viscous just like the texture of syrup by using heat under evaporator.Centrifugation is the 6th step of manufacturing in which the sugar crystals are removed from the syrup.After all these process the last step is the drying and cooling of the sugar by keeping the sugar in any jar or container

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You cover the main sequence and include the useful detail that growing takes 12–18 months and harvesting can be mechanical or manual. However, the response is below the required 150 words: 145 words were counted, with nine words copied from the prompt excluded. The overview is limited to saying there are seven steps, rather than summarising the process as a whole—for example, that cane is processed into juice, then syrup, and finally sugar. Some details are inaccurate or unsupported: the diagram shows crystals being separated from syrup in the centrifuge, not removed from it, and it does not say the final product is kept in a jar or container. Develop the overview and report only what the diagram shows.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The stages are presented in the correct general order, and sequencing phrases such as “Starting from the 1st step,” “After this,” and “The 3rd step” help the reader follow the process. However, the response is written as one long paragraph, so the introduction, overview, and process details are not clearly separated. Several transitions are repetitive or mechanical, with frequent reliance on step numbers rather than showing how one stage leads to the next. The long middle section also joins many stages into a single sentence, making the progression harder to follow. Use separate paragraphs and clearer links such as “The resulting juice is then…” to create a more coherent account.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant process vocabulary, including “crushing,” “purified,” “limestone filter,” “evaporator,” and “centrifugation,” which helps communicate the stages. There are also attempts at more specific description, such as “viscous” and “texture of syrup.” However, spelling and word-choice problems are noticeable: “daigrame,” “harvesting” where a passive form is needed, and “4rth” reduce accuracy and polish. Some expressions are awkward or imprecise, including “manufacturing process for making” and “extra water.” The phrase “any jar or container” adds an unsupported object rather than describing the diagram. Aim for concise, natural process language and check spelling and collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts some longer structures, including “When sugar canes are fully grown…” and a clause explaining what happens in the centrifuge. However, the range is limited, and errors recur in sentence construction, verb forms, articles, and punctuation. For example, “comprises of 7 steps” has an incorrect verb pattern, while “they are harvesting” should use a passive construction. “After this in the 4rth step in which…” is an incomplete clause, and “After all these process” has a number-agreement error. Several sentences run together without appropriate full stops or commas, particularly the description of evaporation. Use shorter, complete sentences and check passive forms and agreement.

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