Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The diagram illustrates manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Overall, it is clear that their are 7 major stage of manufacturing suger cane for making suger. The most lenghy part of this process is growing suger canes from fild. and this comlicated process end with drying and cooling suger.

The the suger making process start with growing suger canes in fild. it took almost 12-18 monthes. It took a long time, Afther growing suger canes the second stage is cutting down suger canes from fild. it useally done by harvesting machin but in small fild their can be use human. the 3rd stage is making suger cane juce from harvest suger canes.Afther that the surgan juice send for purefication by limesione filter. In the 5th rage the purify Juice heat in a fixerd tempareture .in this prossces juice become suger syrup. in the 6th stage called centrifuge at this tage the separetes sugar crystals from syrup .

At the last sa

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the process as having seven stages and include several key details, such as the 12–18-month growing period, harvesting, crushing, limestone filtration, evaporation and centrifuging. This shows a relevant understanding of the diagram. However, coverage is incomplete: the response ends abruptly at “At the last sa”, so the final drying and cooling stage is not actually described. Some details are also inaccurate or unsupported, including saying harvesting is usually mechanical and that people are used in small fields; the diagram shows two methods but gives no such conditions. To strengthen the summary, report the final stage and describe the sequence accurately without adding assumptions.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic overall structure, with an opening, an overview and a paragraph describing the stages in sequence. The numbered references (“the second stage”, “the 3rd stage”, “the 5th stage”) help the reader follow the process. However, progression becomes difficult to track because linking is repetitive and sometimes faulty, as in “After that” and “At the last sa”; the ending is incomplete. Several sentences run together or are separated by full stops in awkward places, such as “from fild. and this comlicated process…”. Organise the stages into complete sentences, use a wider range of accurate transitions, and ensure the final paragraph reaches a clear conclusion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant process vocabulary, including “harvesting”, “crushing”, “purification”, “limestone filter”, “syrup” and “centrifuge”. These terms help communicate the main stages. However, spelling errors are frequent and sometimes make the text harder to understand, for example “suger”, “juce”, “purefication” and “limesione”. There are also imprecise or unnatural choices such as “cutting down” for harvesting and “making sugar cane juice” for extracting juice from the cane. Build accuracy with the diagram’s process terms, and check spelling and collocations carefully. For example, “extracting juice” and “the juice is purified” are clearer and more natural descriptions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple sentences and longer descriptions, and the sequence is generally understandable. However, grammatical control is weak across the response, with frequent errors in sentence structure, agreement, articles and verb forms. Examples include “their are 7 major stage”, “it took almost 12-18 monthes”, and “the purify Juice heat in a fixerd tempareture”. The final fragment, “At the last sa”, also leaves the response unfinished. Punctuation and capitalisation are inconsistent, and some clauses are joined without clear boundaries. Practise forming complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, for example, “The purified juice is heated in an evaporator and becomes syrup.” Then proofread for agreement, plurals and sentence endings.

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