Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-07-26
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
How sugar is produced from sugar cane
Student answer (Band 5.5)
In the above image we can show that their is the crop of sugar cane .It take gerannaly 12 to 18 month to grow.The crop of sugar can need a lot water to grew up.After that when the suger cane is ready .So the farmers harvesting the crops through hands and machinary.The suger cane sent into the firm.The sugar cane was putting in the machine and machine produce the juice of suger cane.After that we need to purify the juice through limestone filter.In the next step purifying juice was putting in the cylender and heat the juice.After sometime jucie evaporate we found suger in the foam of liquid crystal.We dry and cool that product . Finally the suger is ready
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. While you have identified the main stages of the process, the description is quite basic and lacks the analytical depth required for an Academic Task 1 response. You have not provided an overview of the process as a whole, nor have you used appropriate academic language to describe the flow of the diagram. The response reads more like a list of steps rather than a cohesive summary. To improve, ensure you include an introductory sentence that paraphrases the prompt and a clear overview paragraph that highlights the key stages of the manufacturing cycle.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response lacks paragraphing, which is essential for a clear structure in IELTS writing. The sentences are linked in a very mechanical and repetitive way, often starting with 'After that' or 'In the next step'. There is a lack of variety in cohesive devices, and the progression of ideas feels disjointed. To improve, you should group related stages of the process into distinct paragraphs (e.g., cultivation, extraction, and purification) and use a wider range of linking words such as 'subsequently', 'following this', or 'once the process is complete' to improve the flow between sentences.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic terms like 'suger cane' (spelled incorrectly as 'suger' and 'sugar') and 'machine'. There are several spelling errors, such as 'gerannaly' (generally), 'cylender' (cylinder), and 'jucie' (juice). The range of vocabulary is insufficient to demonstrate the precision needed for describing a technical process. To improve, focus on using more precise terminology related to industrial processes, such as 'crushing', 'evaporation', 'filtration', and 'centrifugation', and ensure you check your spelling carefully before submitting.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('It take', 'crop... need'), incorrect verb forms ('was putting', 'found suger'), and missing articles. The sentence structures are predominantly simple, with very few attempts at complex sentences. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with several run-on sentences and incorrect capitalization. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically ensuring that verbs agree with their subjects and that you use the correct tense for describing a process (usually the present simple passive).
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