Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-07-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In this paragraph we have to summarize the sugar cane manufacture process from the start to at the end process to how to make sugar

At the first of growing sugar cane is buried in farms ton produce sugar cane it takes 12 to 18 months to grow in this process they also have to save all crops from the flood

Then farmers harvest all the crops with big machines cutters and knife and send it too crushing process to produce the sugar canes juice then it will go through from limestone filter to produce purifying juice

Then the evaporator evaporates all the bacteria and juice will be converted into syrup then it will grow through from the centrifuge to separates all the sugar Crystals from the syrup then they will waste the syrup

Then all sugar crystal transfer into drum for drying and cooling the sugar to make a best quality

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers the main stages of the sugar production process, from cultivation to the final drying stage. However, the overview is missing, and the introduction is informal and repetitive, failing to clearly summarize the process as a whole. While the key steps are identified, the description lacks precision; for instance, the claim that the evaporator 'evaporates all the bacteria' is scientifically inaccurate based on the provided diagram. The response would benefit from a more formal tone and a clearer summary of the overall transformation from raw material to finished product.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response uses basic cohesive devices such as 'Then' and 'At the first' to sequence the stages. However, the paragraphing is inconsistent and the flow between sentences feels mechanical. The opening sentence is unnecessary and does not contribute to the logical progression of the report. To improve, you should use a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus, such as grouping the initial agricultural stages separately from the industrial processing stages.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive, relying on basic verbs like 'produce', 'make', and 'send'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'at the first of growing' and 'waste the syrup'. While the terminology related to the process (e.g., 'centrifuge', 'evaporator', 'crystals') is present, the overall range is narrow. To achieve a higher score, focus on using more precise verbs and nouns to describe industrial processes, such as 'extract', 'refine', and 'by-product'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors, including issues with articles ('the sugar canes juice'), subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure. Many sentences are run-on or lack proper punctuation, which makes the text difficult to read at times. There is a lack of complex sentence structures; most sentences are simple or poorly connected. Improving your control over basic sentence construction and ensuring correct use of prepositions and articles will significantly enhance the clarity of your writing.

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