Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-07-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The diagram gives information about step by step process of how sugar is produced from sugar cane.

Overall, It was taking seven steps starting with growing sugar canes andapplying several operations like crushing, filtering, Evaporating and centrifuge to get sugar as a result.

Fristly Sugar canes seeeds are planted, it takes around 12 to 18 months for growth into sugar cane further sugar canes are harvested in two methods one is by using machine and truck cutting another method by farmers harvested using tools. The harvested canes are crushed into juice using rotation machine power. In the next step with conical shapped filter by arranged limestone to filter juice.

By heating sugar cane juice, juice becomes into syrup called evaporator the resulted syrup under goes to centrifuge which divided sugar crystals from syrup finally, crystals are getting dry and cool to get a sugar as a end product which is ready for using.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response covers the main stages of the sugar production process, from harvesting to the final product. However, the overview is slightly weak; it lists the steps rather than highlighting the key features or the nature of the process (e.g., that it is a multi-stage industrial cycle). While the main features are identified, the description of the 'limestone' filter and the 'centrifuge' stage lacks technical precision. To improve, ensure the overview synthesizes the process more effectively and provides a clearer summary of the transformation from raw material to finished product.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The response is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the sequence of events. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally awkward, such as 'Fristly' (a spelling error) and 'In the next step'. The transition between the harvesting stage and the processing stage is clear, but the flow within the final paragraph is slightly disjointed. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear thematic focus would enhance the logical progression of the report.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but there are several instances of imprecise word choice and spelling errors, such as 'conical shapped' instead of 'conical-shaped' and 'seeeds'. The use of 'rotation machine power' is unnatural; 'mechanical crushers' or 'industrial rollers' would be more appropriate. While the student attempts to use process-specific terminology like 'centrifuge' and 'evaporator', the overall range is limited. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise collocations and ensuring accurate spelling of technical terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. For example, 'It was taking seven steps' is an incorrect tense usage for describing a process, and 'juice becomes into syrup' is grammatically incorrect. There are also issues with article usage and punctuation, such as 'a sugar as a end product'. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct prepositional usage will significantly improve the accuracy.

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