Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-04
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
How sugar is produced from sugar cane
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugarcane. We can discuss the how sugar is formed so first of all the farmer can growing the sugar cane with the time period is 12-18 months after growing of sugarcane then they can divided into two parts first is cutting by hand is a difficult and most of time gain. And the second process is easy and fast most of the people have different thinking some have cutting by hand and some have cutting by machine after the cutting of sugarcane then goes to the next step is crushing sugarcane can enter in the process and juice can formed then juice can pass through from purifying process they have also limestone filter juice can pass through the filter and formed in the shape of drops. Then drops can enter into the evaporator give the required heat then juice can become syrup. The syrup can enter into the centrifuge work is separate sugar crystals from syrup then goes to the last step is drying and cooling crystals are enter in to this and sugar can formed.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main stages of the sugar production process, from growing to final cooling. However, the description is somewhat mechanical and lacks a clear overview of the process as a whole. The student includes unnecessary subjective commentary, such as 'most of the people have different thinking,' which is irrelevant to a technical process description. While the key stages are identified, the lack of a formal introduction and a clear summary of the overall process prevents a higher score. The response focuses on listing steps rather than synthesizing the information effectively.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is written as a single, long paragraph, which makes it difficult to follow. There is a lack of logical paragraphing to separate the different stages of the process. Cohesive devices are used in a very repetitive and mechanical way, such as the constant use of 'then' to link every sentence. There is a lack of variety in transition words, and the referencing is often unclear, making the progression of ideas feel disjointed rather than fluid.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. The student relies heavily on basic verbs like 'formed,' 'enter,' and 'pass.' There is little attempt to use precise technical vocabulary related to industrial processes, such as 'extraction,' 'refinement,' or 'crystallization.' Some word choices are awkward, such as 'most of time gain' and 'the how sugar is formed.' The range is sufficient to convey the basic meaning, but it lacks the precision and flexibility required for a higher band score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The grammar is characterized by frequent errors that occasionally impede readability. There are significant issues with verb tense consistency and sentence structure, such as 'the farmer can growing' and 'juice can pass through from purifying process.' Many sentences are run-on or lack proper punctuation, making the text feel like a stream of consciousness. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the control over basic grammar is inconsistent, which significantly impacts the clarity of the report.
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