Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The provided diagram below illustrates the manufacturing process for made sugar from sugar cane then how make sugar and throw the different companies and how sweet is produced from sweet cane.

At First stage,many peoples plants the seeds the sugar cane then sweet canes has growing 12 to 18 months,At Second stage either some people harvest their crop themselves on the other hand some persons use machine to harvest the sweet canes,At third stage these crushing the canes then crush canes and made the juice after that At the fourth stage, Juice purifying the limestone filter so that sugar make the clean then At the fifth stage juice sent to the evaporator heat juice becomes the syrup after that At the sixth stage,syrup throw the centrifuge and then separations sweet crystals from syrup more over finally thick liquid at put it for drying and cooling then after that made the sugar.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response covers the main stages of the sugar production process, from cultivation to the final product. However, the description is quite repetitive and lacks a clear overview or summary of the process as a whole. The student describes the steps sequentially but fails to highlight the key features or make meaningful comparisons, such as the two methods of harvesting. The inclusion of unnecessary personal commentary and repetitive phrasing (e.g., 'how make sugar') detracts from the professional tone required for an Academic Task 1 report. To improve, the student should focus on summarizing the process more concisely and objectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is written as a single, long paragraph, which makes it difficult to follow. While there is a basic attempt to sequence the stages using transition words like 'At First stage' and 'At the fourth stage', these are used mechanically and often incorrectly. The lack of proper paragraphing and the repetitive use of 'then' and 'after that' create a disjointed flow. There is no clear logical progression between the different phases of the process, and the referencing is often unclear, making the text feel like a list of actions rather than a cohesive report.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often inaccurate. The student uses basic terms repeatedly, such as 'sweet canes' and 'made the sugar'. There are several instances of incorrect word forms, such as 'peoples plants' instead of 'people plant' and 'juice purifying' instead of 'the juice is purified'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe a technical process effectively. To reach a higher band, the student needs to use more precise terminology related to manufacturing processes, such as 'extraction', 'filtration', and 'crystallization', and improve their control over word choice and collocation.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede readability. There is a lack of control over basic sentence structures, with many run-on sentences and missing articles or auxiliary verbs (e.g., 'juice sent to the evaporator' instead of 'the juice is sent to the evaporator'). Subject-verb agreement is inconsistent, and the use of punctuation is poor, with commas used incorrectly to join independent clauses. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, error-prone sentences. Significant improvement in basic sentence construction and verb tense consistency is required.

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