Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

9th August. Task 1

Process chart.

The rendered pictorial outlines elucidates the stages of making sugar from sugar cane.

Overall, this can be explicitly seen a complex procedure, this is a seven steps cascade process, which commence with growing sugar cane and culminate with drying and cooling.

Zooming into the details, initially sugar can is grown by farmer, its duration is 12-18 months. Then this is harvested by mahine or manually workforce. After words, sugar cane is crushed by machine and juice is extracted.

Subsequently juice is purified by limestone filter than heated in Evaporator which turn juice into syrup form. In second last step, with help of centrifuge sugar crystals are separated from the syrup and process culminate with drying and cooling the sugar grains.

9th August. Task-1

Process chart.

The rendered pictorial outlines elucidates the stages of making sugar from sugar cane.

Overall, this can be explicitly seen a complex procedure. This is a seven steps cascade process, which commence with growing sugar cane and culminate with drying and cooling.

Zooming into the details, initially sugar can is grown by farmer, its duration is 12-18 months. Then this is harvested by machine or manually workforce. After words, sugar cane is crushed by machine and juice is extracted.

Subsequently, juice is purified by limestone filter than heated in evaporator which turn juice into syrup form. In second last step, with help of centrifuge sugar crystals are separated from the syrup and process culminate with drying and cooling the sugar grains into the large containers. Each process is crutical crucial and benefie important

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all stages of the process, from growing to the final product. The overview identifies the process as complex and seven-stepped, which is a good attempt at summarizing the main features. However, the response is somewhat repetitive, as the student included the same text twice. While the main features are highlighted, the description of the stages could be more precise; for example, the transition from 'purified' to 'heated' is clear, but the connection between the centrifuge and the final product could be more explicitly linked to the diagram's flow. Overall, the task is addressed adequately, but the inclusion of duplicate text detracts from the professional presentation.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The response is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear attempt to use cohesive devices such as 'initially', 'then', 'subsequently', and 'in second last step'. However, the flow is significantly disrupted by the repetition of the entire text. Within the paragraphs, the progression of ideas is generally logical, but the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly inaccurate, such as 'After words' (likely meant 'Afterwards'). The paragraphing is present, but the structural integrity is compromised by the duplication of the content, which makes the overall coherence feel disjointed.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'extracted', 'purified', 'evaporator', and 'centrifuge'. There are some spelling errors and word-choice issues, such as 'mahine' instead of 'machine', 'After words' instead of 'Afterwards', and 'crutical' instead of 'crucial'. The phrase 'manually workforce' is also grammatically incorrect; 'manual labor' or 'manual workers' would be more appropriate. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the meaning of the process, the errors in spelling and collocation prevent a higher score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'sugar can is grown' (missing 'e'), 'turn juice' (should be 'turns'), and 'process culminate' (should be 'culminates'). Subject-verb agreement is inconsistent throughout the text. Punctuation is generally functional, but the repetition of the text creates a confusing reading experience. While the meaning is usually clear despite these errors, the frequency of grammatical slips indicates a lack of control over more complex structures, keeping the score in the mid-range.

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