Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The diagram demonstrates the inventing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Overall, it can be observed that, how sugar produced from sugar can it is clearly seen in the whole process. Farmer grows the sugarcanes and then crushing sugar canes in a machine then after purifying the juices end of the process sugar put into a big pot for drying and cooling

To begin with first step of the sugar manufacturing is that, initially do the sugar plantation first then sugar have taken time grown around 12-18 months of time period.alothgy

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, reaching only 92 words. This significantly impacts the ability to fully address the task. While the student attempts to describe the process, the summary is incomplete, missing several key stages of the sugar production cycle shown in the diagram, such as the centrifuge and the final packaging. The overview provided is fragmented and lacks the necessary detail to clearly explain the process. Because the response is substantially under-length and fails to cover the key features of the diagram, it cannot achieve a higher band score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks a logical structure. While there is an attempt at an introduction and a body paragraph, the progression of ideas is disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is minimal and often misused, such as the abrupt ending with 'alothgy'. Paragraphing is not used effectively to separate the stages of the process. The sentences are often run-on or grammatically incomplete, which makes the flow of information difficult to follow. To improve, the student should focus on using clear transition signals (e.g., 'firstly', 'subsequently', 'finally') to guide the reader through the stages of the process.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. There are several word-choice errors, such as 'inventing process' instead of 'manufacturing process' and 'sugar can' instead of 'sugar cane'. The student relies on basic vocabulary and struggles to use precise terminology related to the process (e.g., 'crushing', 'purifying', 'centrifuge'). The spelling is also inconsistent, which hinders communication. To reach a higher band, the student needs to expand their range of vocabulary to include more specific process-related terms and ensure accurate spelling and word formation.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, error-prone sentences. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'Farmer grows'), article usage, and sentence structure (e.g., 'how sugar produced from sugar can it is clearly seen'). Many sentences are fragmented or lack proper punctuation, making them difficult to read. There is no evidence of complex sentence structures. To improve, the student must focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring that each sentence has a clear subject and verb, and work on using articles and prepositions correctly.

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