Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The diagram illustrates the steps by which sugar cane is converted into sugar through a manufacturing process.

Overall, it is evident that it is a man-made cyclical process. The process is mainly divided into 7 distinct steps. Moreover, advanced machinery and conventional pecking methods are used while harvesting.

The sugar production process begins with the planting of sugar cane until it becomes mature after 12 to 18 months. Then the most difficult part is harvesting the raw materials; mainly two methods are followed in this process: the first technique is using automatic raw material collection by a modern machine and the second one is the traditional way of collecting by a worker. After collecting sugarcane, it goes through a machine where sugarcane is squeezed to make juice. In the fourth step, the juice undergoes a funnel-like purifying machine. Afterwards, in a huge barrel tank the juice is heated over a high flame, where the juice turns into syrup.

In the 6th stage, in a centrifuge circle machine, sugar crystals are separated and only the crystals are collected for further drying and cooling. In the final process, after being dried and cooled, the sugar is turned into an edible product.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all stages of the process, from planting to the final product. You have successfully identified the main features, such as the two harvesting methods and the key mechanical stages. However, the overview is slightly inaccurate; you describe the process as 'cyclical,' but the diagram depicts a linear manufacturing sequence. Additionally, the mention of 'pecking methods' is unclear and does not accurately reflect the visual information provided. To improve, ensure your overview focuses on the transformation from raw material to finished product rather than misinterpreting the nature of the process.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The response is logically organized, following the chronological order of the process. You use a range of cohesive devices such as 'Afterwards,' 'In the 6th stage,' and 'In the final process' to guide the reader through the steps. Paragraphing is used effectively to separate the introduction and overview from the detailed body of the process. While the flow is generally smooth, some transitions feel slightly mechanical. Overall, the information is presented in a clear, coherent manner that is easy to follow.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'centrifuge,' 'purifying,' and 'mature.' However, there are some instances of imprecise word choice, such as 'pecking methods' and 'centrifuge circle machine,' which are not standard terminology for this process. While these errors do not impede communication, they limit your ability to achieve a higher band score. Incorporating more precise technical vocabulary related to industrial processes would enhance the quality of your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as 'The diagram illustrates the steps by which sugar cane is converted...' and 'After collecting sugarcane, it goes through a machine where sugarcane is squeezed.' There are some minor grammatical slips, such as the repetitive use of 'sugarcane' and slight awkwardness in phrasing like 'the most difficult part is harvesting.' However, your control of grammar is generally good, and the errors present do not cause any confusion for the reader.

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