Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The process chart provides information related to manufacturing process for making suger forom suger cane.

Overall, there are 8 eight different steps for making suger forom suger cane. It started with suger canes and ended up with evaporator. drying and cooling

In this process chart, the first step of collecting suger forom suger cane is growing of suger cane. Suger cane takes a time of 12 to 18 months for fully grown. After that, the second step is harvesting. There are two step to harvest suger cane by hands as well as by machines. Moreover, the third step is crushing, after harvesting sugercanes are undergoing through the crushing machine. After crushing the juice of suger canes will be collected. The fourth step is purifying juice, to purify the bad particals limestone filter is used to filter the juice.

Move to fifth step which waporator. To evaporate the juice heat is crucial. After the evaporation juice become syrup. The sixth step is seprates suger crystals forom syrup. After completing the process of seprate crystals forom syrup the

last step (seventh step) is drying and cooling . In this step after seprating suger particles it will go forom drying under the sun as well as by machines.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main stages of the sugar production process, from growing to the final drying and cooling phase. However, the overview is weak; it merely lists the number of steps rather than highlighting the key stages or the transformation of the raw material. Furthermore, the description of the process is somewhat fragmented, and the final sentence is incomplete, which impacts the clarity of the report. While the main features are identified, the lack of a cohesive summary and the incomplete ending prevent a higher score. To improve, ensure you provide a clear, concise overview of the entire process in the introduction and ensure all sentences are complete.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is hindered by frequent grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. While some transition words like 'Moreover' and 'After that' are used, they are often applied mechanically. The referencing is sometimes unclear, and the final paragraph ends abruptly mid-sentence, which disrupts the coherence of the response. Paragraphing is present but not always used effectively to group related stages of the process. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of cohesive devices and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, complete structure that guides the reader through the process logically.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, with frequent spelling errors such as 'suger' instead of 'sugar', 'forom' instead of 'from', and 'waporator' instead of 'evaporator'. There is a lack of precision in describing the technical stages of the process. While the student attempts to use process-related vocabulary, the persistent spelling mistakes and the misuse of terms like 'bad particals' (impurities) and 'waporator' (evaporation) indicate a restricted range. To improve, focus on learning the correct spelling of key process terms and expanding your vocabulary to include more precise verbs and nouns related to industrial manufacturing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('Suger cane takes a time'), incorrect article usage, and awkward sentence structures. There is a limited range of complex structures, and the ones attempted often contain errors, such as 'after seprating suger particles it will go forom drying'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, and the incomplete final sentence is a significant error. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of errors is high enough to cause some difficulty for the reader. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors would be highly beneficial.

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