Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. How the growing process, harvesting, crushing, purifying, evaporator, centrifuge drying and cooling process have been done. The process is completed in 7 steps.

Firstly, the sugar producing process from sugar cane is start by the growing of sugar cane. This process generally takes 12-18 months. After that process, the harvesting process is start. In this phase, sugarcane harvester machine is used. The farmer is involved in this process. Then the crushing process is happened.

Finally, the juice purification process start in which juice purify and then juice become syrup which is known as evaporation. The almost ending phase includes the separation of sugar crystals from syrup. This process is known as centrifuge. The final stage in which we will dry the sugar and cooling stage is also happen. After all of these process finally the sugar is produced from sugar cane.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response covers the main stages of the process, but it lacks a clear overview or summary of the overall transformation. The description is somewhat mechanical and repetitive, listing steps rather than synthesising the information. While all stages are mentioned, the lack of a clear introduction and a concluding summary of the process flow limits the score. The response would benefit from grouping the stages more logically (e.g., preparation, processing, and final output) to better highlight the main features of the diagram.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is organised into a single block of text, which makes it difficult to follow the progression of the process. While some cohesive devices like 'Firstly', 'After that', and 'Finally' are used, they are somewhat repetitive and mechanical. The lack of paragraphing is a significant issue for coherence. The logical flow is present, but the overall structure is underdeveloped, and the transition between the various stages of the sugar production process could be managed more effectively to improve readability.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. Words like 'process' are used excessively throughout the text (e.g., 'growing process', 'harvesting process', 'crushing process'). There is little attempt to use more precise or varied terminology related to industrial manufacturing. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the basic meaning of the diagram, it lacks the range and flexibility required for a higher band score. More specific verbs and nouns related to the stages of production would greatly enhance the quality of the writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with verb tenses and subject-verb agreement. For example, 'the sugar producing process... is start' should be 'starts' or 'is started'. Similarly, 'the crushing process is happened' is grammatically incorrect; it should be 'the crushing process takes place'. The sentence structures are mostly simple, and there is a lack of complex sentence forms. These errors, while not always impeding communication, are frequent enough to suggest a limited control over grammatical structures.

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