Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
How sugar is produced from sugar cane
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The diagram Demostrate how suger is produced in the factory.Overall,there is more stages for suger to be produced from sugarcane to suger.
Initially,Cuttings of sugarcane are prepared for planting after the garden is cleared.Later for about a year and some months, sugarcane grows and matured.Second stage is Harvesting,where sugarcane is catted either by Man or tractor and went straight to the factory for manufacturing processes.
Soon after harvest,the canes are put in the machine where is crushed and during this process juice is produced.And the fourth stage is where juice is purified by adding limestone filter,and then is transferred to evaporator where juice is heated.
On sixnth stage,it where sugar crystals is separated from syrup since at this stage can be used ,and the last stage is where sugar is drying and cooling and is ready to be used by people,and the process of packaging can also start for it be on the market.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main stages of the process, but the overview is weak and lacks a clear summary of the key features. While you mention that there are 'more stages', you do not highlight the transformation from raw material to finished product effectively. The description of the stages is generally accurate, but some steps are slightly under-developed. To improve, ensure your overview identifies the most significant aspects of the process, such as the transition from agricultural growth to industrial refinement, rather than just stating that there are multiple stages. Ensure all parts of the diagram are clearly linked to the process flow.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the sequence of events. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and repetitive (e.g., 'Initially', 'Second stage', 'Soon after'). There are also issues with referencing; for instance, 'On sixnth stage,it where...' is grammatically awkward and disrupts the flow. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words and ensure that your sentences are connected more naturally. Improving the transition between the agricultural phase and the industrial phase would also enhance the overall coherence of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There are several spelling errors, such as 'Demostrate' instead of 'demonstrate', 'suger' instead of 'sugar', and 'sixnth' instead of 'sixth'. Additionally, some word choices are unnatural, such as 'catted' (likely meant 'cut') and 'garden' (which is not the standard term for a sugarcane plantation). To achieve a higher band, focus on using more precise technical vocabulary related to manufacturing processes and ensure correct spelling throughout your writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'there is more stages' (should be 'there are more stages') and 'sugar crystals is separated' (should be 'are separated'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and periods. The sentence structures are relatively simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors. To improve, practice subject-verb agreement and focus on consistent punctuation. Reviewing basic sentence construction will help you produce more accurate and readable text.
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