Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given chart illustrates the information about manufacturing process for making sugar from sugarcane. The given process is follow to make sugar from sugarcane.

From an overview analysis, it is manifest that all the mentioned process witnessed that how it goes in industries as a raw material and by which process is follow to make sugar from sugarcane.

Going into depth, there are various steps which follow to make sugar from sugarcane firstly farmer grow sugar it takes 12 to 18 months to grow properly second step is harvesting in this step farmer cut down his crops by hand or by machines next step is crushing in this process sugarcane is crushed by machines fourth step is purifying in this liquid sugarcane is purify in next step liquid sugarcane is evaporate by heat in this juice becomes syrup next step is centrifuge in this seperate sugar cyristals from syrup the lat step is drying and cooling in this last process we got sugar which is maked from sugar

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response covers the main stages of the sugar production process, from growing to final packaging. However, the overview is weak and lacks a clear summary of the key features or the overall nature of the process. The description of the stages is somewhat repetitive and lacks the necessary analytical tone required for an Academic Task 1 report. While all steps are mentioned, the lack of a formal structure and the inclusion of unnecessary personal commentary (e.g., 'we got sugar') detract from the professional standard expected at higher bands.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay lacks proper paragraphing, appearing as a single block of text. While there is a basic attempt at logical sequencing using transition words like 'firstly', 'second', and 'next', the flow is hindered by the lack of sentence variety and punctuation. The absence of clear paragraph breaks between the introduction, overview, and body stages makes the text difficult to navigate. Cohesive devices are used in a mechanical and repetitive manner, which limits the overall coherence of the response.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic verbs like 'make', 'grow', and 'cut'. There are several spelling errors, such as 'cyristals' and 'maked', which indicate a lack of control over word formation. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe a technical process with precision. To improve, you should focus on using more specific terminology related to industrial processes, such as 'extraction', 'refinement', 'crystallisation', and 'evaporation', rather than repeating simple phrases.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response consists primarily of simple sentences with frequent grammatical errors. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'process is follow'), missing articles, and incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'liquid sugarcane is evaporate'). Punctuation is almost entirely absent, leading to run-on sentences that make the text difficult to read. There is no evidence of complex sentence structures, which is a requirement for higher band scores. Improving your control over passive voice constructions is essential for describing processes accurately.

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