Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given process chart illustrates the information about process of production of sugar from sugarcane.

Overall it is crystal clear that the first process of growing of sugarcane will we converted into sugar at the end step.

At a fleeting glance, the first and foremost step is to grow sugarcane which takes about 12-18 months to ready for the harvesting. Followed by this harvesting takes time about only 1-2 days sugarcane harvested by man and by machine also. After harvesting third step is crushing of sugarcane pushed inside one by one into crushing machine and by crushing sugarcane juice will coming into big jar of glass.

Moving further, furthermore juice will poured into limestone filter to purifying the juice from dust particle and other. Fifth step used to evaporate the juice at high temperature to make syrup. Sixth step is used to separates the sugar crystals from the

syrup this process is called centrifuge. The last one is drying and cooling to sugar after this process sugar packed into different packaging of 5 kg 10 kg etc and goes to market sold with good profit respectively.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main stages of the process, from growing to packaging. However, the overview is weak and lacks a clear summary of the key features, such as the transition from biological growth to industrial processing. The description of the steps is generally accurate, but the inclusion of irrelevant details like 'sold with good profit' is not supported by the diagram and detracts from the academic tone. To improve, focus on describing the transformation of the raw material into the final product without adding external information or personal commentary.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The response is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the sequence. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'At a fleeting glance' and 'Moving further, furthermore'. The transition between sentences is sometimes abrupt, and the referencing is occasionally unclear. The logical progression is present, but the flow is hindered by awkward phrasing and repetitive sentence structures. Improving the variety and precision of linking words would significantly enhance the coherence of the report.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the precision required for a higher band. There are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'ready for the harvesting' instead of 'ready for harvest' and 'juice will coming into' instead of 'juice is collected'. The range is somewhat limited, relying on basic verbs and nouns. To achieve a higher score, you should focus on using more precise technical terminology related to industrial processes and improving your control over word forms and collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Issues include incorrect verb tenses ('juice will poured'), missing articles ('into crushing machine'), and awkward phrasing ('first process of growing of sugarcane will we converted'). While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to be noticeable and affect the overall clarity of the report. Focusing on subject-verb agreement, correct article usage, and consistent tense application will help improve your accuracy.

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